Tears puddled in rain
you in your business suit.
Walking toward the taxi
you waved a bitter goodbye.
Leaving my eyes to cry
wondering why?
To many years later,
a song plays on the radio.
Softly swaying my hips
sadly i still think of you.
A contest entry
- Thinking Of You. by Poetryintheblood.
375 points, ended October 28, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's Impossible by magdelene.
1000 points, ended January 9, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josephine
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This was a sad moment for you or your memories.
It was really good for your first few writes, I would suggest a few more details to keep the readers entraced but still its a wonderful write !
Dont pay any attention to me i usaully dont tell people about their poems but you have hidden talent !
~Lisa~
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Very nice. You bring the reader into your memory, into the moment. It's amazing what things can trigger old memories to come back to the surface. Enjoyed!
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