She lied to make the world more romantic,
She cried to live a lie.
She wanted the truth |so|pedantic|,
So haunted inside her insides.
The falsity screamed of denial,
The friends, they screamed of deceit.
The quantity of it was vile,
The quality of it was sweet.
And how, but oh how to escape it,
The thickening blue masquerade.
And what would she give not to fake it,
The thickening bubbling hate.
So to sum the up best with a smile,
And part with a splendid affair.
Just sit with her for a while,
And play with her cascading hair.
She'll tell you a story of warriors,
And hero's and villain's alike.
The struggling pains and endeavors,
Of the characters in a show called 'real life'.
Please tell me what you think/ criticism more than welcome :)
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I absolutely loved this poem. I thought the spaces added more depth to it as well. I enjoyed all of it but I think that the end was my favorite. Brilliant piece, I look forward to reading more of your work.
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The quantity of it was vile,
The quality of it was sweet.
i truly liked those two lines. you have writte a very good piece here and should be proud of yourself. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie -
One of th3 best. Well thought out, well written. The big three for this one.
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THAT WAS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i wish i could write stuff like that it flowed so well and fit perfectly together how could anyone criticise that!!!!!!!!!! that was aweseom those are such good used words that was soooooooooooooooooooooooo cool 80,000,000,000 thumbs up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Well thought out! Excellent
I wasn't sure what I was reading in the first stanza, although it caught my imagination right away. The use of words in stanza two is brilliant and at that point I was beginning to get into the poem. This relates very well to life as we know it or are willing to admit it.
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