I’m just humbled in proportion,
to the bits I understand,
that we might expect abortion
to nurture life in any land.
As if somewhere, deep in our hearts
the emptiness is not enough
to rip and tear our inner parts
until we think up bigger stuff.
The little ones who come to us
are often unexpected.
You'll never hear them make a fuss
about being rejected.
I’m sure their spirits do just fine
returning back to where they came.
But, it sends shivers up my spine
to know that all they leave is shame.
The universe must have a 'curve'
that suffers souls who just survive;
who hurt so much they've lost their nerve
to shout, “I’m glad … to be alive”!
Please tell me what you think
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I have never read that book but I'll try to get it.You are right I did write that poem for women.Myself included.Thank you for giving a man's pespective.As for your poem,it really suggests a astute view of lost life.It is very heartwarming to hear the true sadness of a lost life.As a mother of three living chilren and two miscarried children I thank you for showing the world that those infants were someone to and that you have a sadness for their lost lives.Abortion is a personal choice and I believe all who have to make such a decision everyone around is effected.You write very well,Thanks for letting me read it.
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This is quite beautiful, lovely rhyme. Sad but not judgmental of abortion.
My favorite stanza:
"The little ones who come to us
are often unexpected.
You'll never hear them make a fuss
about being rejected."
So many rhyming poems are forced- and this one isn't. Quiet a good write.
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Loved it
Every person, every kind of life has a right to be alive, We are all imperfect, and we make mistakes, but sometimes our mistakes can bring us great happiness!!
We all have to be accounted for.
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tearjerker....wow! this really touched me. it's excellent. let alone the awesome poetic skills displayed you still managed to convey something that speaks truly to the heart.
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That was a really awesome poem! I really like the way you rhyme things! Great job and thank you for sharing it!
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Hmmmm...Well, for fear of repeating myself I will only say this: Excellent.
Like usual I love what you've penned here!
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Brave, sensitive topic to write on, and rather admirable in approach. Well done.
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i love your second stanza!!
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good write
Has nice flow,very srong delivery and stance! -
Brilliant
Thought provoking and inspiring. I have never really thought too much on abortion, because it is such a sensitive topic. However controversial. I feel you have thought hard on this and inspired many to reconsider before proceeding with this intense procedure that does affect so many. Thank you for sharing such inspirational words with us!
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Absolutely FANTASTIC - a true winner. Captivating and a magnificent rhyme scheme, this piece really shouts the message clearly, yet gracefully.
Nothing short of perfect.
ELW x
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Amen!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I entered this contest as well, but the moderators said "someone" complained about my poem on partial birth abortion, saying it was too graphice and broke the rules of the site. But if you care to take a read it is called almost perdsuaded. Your poem tells it like it is and I believe every abortion doctor is going to see the faces of the fourty+ million babies that have been slaughtered since roe.wade. Thanks for putting the truth out there for all to see!!!~~Toni~~
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This is impressive poetry, carved into the minds of readers by a spirit that has journeyed a long way through space time. Wisdom flows like the words reflecting them, speaking of events inundated in the ignorance of man. It is an accusation against the powers that have shaped life into what it is, a far cry from what it was destined to be. Yet I believe these malformations are transient and about to be transposed. Allowing space again to express the joy of existing. I thoroughly enjoyed being on this page to read and ponder. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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This is a great, but sad poem. I like it very much. Hope you win the contest.
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You da man, sul tan!
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I am so impressed to read a rhyming poem that capably and seriously handles so sensitive a topic. The "deep in our hearts" stanza is particularly insightful, but with humility you call my attention to the everlasting human compulsion to know hope and joy instead of furthering our pain and suffering. Thank you.
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sadly, they who want babies sometimes end up childless, and they who don't want them, kill them...
Wish I had the power to stop this!!!
Your poem was nominated for front page by me!!! Hope it makes a difrence and save a life.
Thanks for standing up for a good cause!
All the best for the contest!
♥Becks
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you have deep insight
and much wisdom. This is a thing seldom seen anymore.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Smile,
Judy
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Unusual but thought provoking
Line 3:
of how thinking that abortion
probably ought to read:
of thinking how that abortion
other than that it's a fine, if not slightly cryptic piece. If I understand the last verse, it is a lament for the children who aren't aborted, but brought up in terrible conditions and have no reason to shout, “I’m glad … to be alive”!
The overall tempo of your last couple of pieces has been much more consistent. Good work.
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Meant to mean something broader ....
You can take the last verse that way, but the proposition is broader. I’m suggesting here that the fear of pain and suffering, of all sorts of experiences, imprints misery into people and results in their contempt for the ‘natural order of things’ … the ‘curve of the universe’.
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