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wheels screech to a stop—
dancing ripples on concrete
resonate footsteps


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  • Pollycheck
    March 27, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my haiku contest.

    Wheels screech to a stop--
    dancing ripples on concrete
    resonate footsteps.

    This well written and well thought out. You have done a good job with this one.


  • micol
    November 9, 2007

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    Nice juxtaposition of opposing senses--the urgency of 'screech' and the gentleness of 'ripples', coming together in the final line. Well done.


  • Kuranya gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    Excellent haiku here, I love that you have stepped outside the box on this one and done something different, I will expect to see you in the trophy winners

    Karen


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    Nice approach along with your vivid imagery. Good luck in the Rain Haiku Contest!


    Ted E


    PS: Calling ALL Rain Lovers: a group has been started for you:

    http://allpoetry.com/group/show/I%20Truly%20Love%20The%20Rain


  • azure85 gold member
    October 28, 2007

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    Wheels screech to a stop--
    dancing ripples on concrete
    resonate footsteps.

    I like the aspect of sound within this haiku, you can hear and feel the rain. Thank you for an excellent rainy day haiku!

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