no twisted metal
just a man in black
and pain
and the
burning bloody
water going down the drain
broken backbone
crying in the shower
isn't really crying
i told her
afterwards
but what was she to say?
there was nothing
and i
kept
crying
Author notes
long story. something that happened to my friend. pm me if you want to know.
A contest entry
- Abortion: Anything Goes by SignifyingNothing.
425 points, ended November 18, 2007, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is some truly great imagery (as others have said) and it captures so beautifully the sadness of abortion (unless I am interpreting this incorrectly) I think of blood and fetal tissue swirling down a drain linked by an image to the 'father' crying in the shower. At least, that is what I take away from the poem. I do not know if my interpretation is correct. The poem is just vague enough to give several possible interpretations. Great write, and thank you for sharing it with me!
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different
vivid
seej
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Great imagery here, makes an impression. Best of luck in you contest!
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vivid and intriguing, wonderful imagery. the repetition of cryng is very effective; not too much, but enough to make an impact.
i wish you all the best in the contest
lucy
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