Watching you sleep, I see smiles and frustrations
of the dream-life you lead without me.
Silently, I relive the love we've shared:
long walks by moonlight on an ivory coast,
youthful play that rolls back the years,
the good times...and the bad.
The Treachery of a mailman, a plumber,
and at least one pizza delivery boy!
The shadows flicker like my thoughts,
and I remember that I must NEVER repeat my mistakes!
I turn to leave, with a last soulful glance...
I'd tell you the house is on fire,
but you're not beating MY ass again!!
Author notes
On "barking" for contest
I lie down on paper and snore in ink.
Before that, I had no life! heehee
A contest entry
- Freewrite by Samyuktha P.C..
450 points, ended October 29, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Ms Rainbow, There is a consistency in your thoughts of pain that I find rather grand (sorry). You knock out a fine poem when the hurt squeezes at your pen. ---- And I like a fine poem. ---- Thank you.
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Hmm.. dark, a bit of emotion, and hard poem. Really well written, keep you through every line not wanting to judge it till you finish. Really dark! Makes me raise my eyebrows till my hairline. But brilliant. On my toes here. Keep writing. Congrats. Love. Sam.
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oh my...this is such a very nice write!!! I loved how you've started it...reminiscing love and then suddenly...there is the realization of not allowing yourself to be fooled again!!! Wonderful!
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Mhmm.
you know what. Your an amazing writer.
Good luck with the contest. xxx
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