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"Faith "

The end result

 of struggle

I feel her sink into water

kicking hard , till tired legs feel numb

she lays back floating a moment

praying God help me across

With renewed strenghth she swims on

to her destiny to loves grace.

She reaches grass edge

(shaking her head in disbelief )

Still  long walk ahead through

feild of hopefulness.

trudging on  running at complete

i think, i can motions.

Sure footed in the unsteady path

she starts to run faster and faster!

Brave now ...

Then she stops dead in her tracks.

The mountain before her looms huge

and majestic.

How Lord ?

She softly says, already out of breath do i climb

this mountain?

She looks up to the sky pleadingly

 

(He speaks ),

My child ,my child

 I never asked you to climb

all I ask of you is to have faith in Me to move it.

She says, move it then if it be Your will.

My earthly but heaven sent

 love awaits me .

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  • Aurielle
    October 28, 2007

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    I feel her sink into water

    kicking hard , till tired legs feel numb

    really beautiful and the ending was wonderful
    some grammar errors at plaece

    I think line 13
    has two "on"

    intersting read


  • Griswold silver member
    October 27, 2007

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    Oh myyyyyyyyy, this gave me chills when god spoke, this is wonderfully done. What beautiful imagery and feeling. Best of luck...Scott

  • Liquid memories
    October 27, 2007
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    excellent presentation of thoughts. success in the contest.


  • AshliiAsphyxiation
    October 27, 2007

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    i LOVE this. the imagery. its great. Bravo on the take to the picture.
    xx
    good luck with the contest.
    Blessed be.

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