Did I kill you with my goals?
Did you give in to the theif of souls?
As did I, must I die?
Is it worse to live in fear
and ignore the advice that I hear?
You tried to take your life
But you take mine cause I'm your wife
Torn glass from your hands
Yelling so we understand
That you are a MAN
In agony paused
Despite the cause
Dieng from self medication
and I love you
so I'm patient
Asking the devil to breath through you
You throw me like a rag doll
till I'm shades of black and blue
Called a cunt and a whore
Never again to be as before
It hurts more
than the bruises
Cause bruises will fade
But oh my love how the detructions
been paved
Did you ever think of love being mighty strong
Can compromise all reason to be deathly wrong
I should have known when I saw the bottle all gone
That would be the end of me
I came back this night on the anniversary of my death
To tell you it's not over yet
Author notes
It's over now.
A contest entry
- Lost Love or Friendship by piccola.
450 points, ended August 21, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice surprise at the end. Lots of emotion in this write. I would love it all the much more if it were presented in stanzas to make the rhyme that much stronger. Thank you for entering, it was a very enjoyable read.
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Please add in your authors note if Tory can use this in her book...Scott & Tory
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Painful memories....
I'm so sorry for what you went through. This tore at my heart. ~Don
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An excellent write, very painfully told and a surprise twist at the end for sure. You should do as requested by the contest owner and edit your authors note with the information requested...Scott
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Wonderful
Very well expressed. A great creation of thoughts. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is a nice poem but did i give you a pic?
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G'day Just
Whoa. Very scary and heart-breaking. I am sorry you had to go through this
Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Chilling
Wow the ending was superb! This write was easy to relate to, I could feel your emotion as I read it. The ending I did not expect, but it was awesome! Good luck. -
okay...several things reread contest contents. None of the info is in the AN.
This was indeed a powerful piece.
I wa looking for inspiration yet then as i reread this..i can relate.
I often felt dead when he was finsihed beating me and literally left gasping for life, yet i believe i was saved for a reason..It wasnt over yet.. and to this day its not. Yet i walk head held high for i will not let him win like he did for 13 years.
Great job. Please put the info i requested in your A.N.
Thanks and blessings to you.
Tory
"Please Lord, cast your hands upon their heart and heal the pain they are suffering. For through you and only YOU will there be peace."
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CHILLING
I came back this night on the anniversary of my death
To tell you it's not over yet
as i read these final two lines the hair on the back of my neck and on my arms stood straight up. it reminded me of the poem, I Got Flowers Today. very chilling but exceptionally well written. viyanna rosemarie
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