I've sliced a confession
on my forearm,
carved a symphony
of jagged notes
I baptized my sin
in 100 proof
potions, in
hopes to purge
the caricature
deviants dwelling
in my mind.
Mass conspiracy theories
and grandiose ideas,
they are the only
ones who comprehend.
[Why won't anyone believe me?]
--
Scattered bits
of clarity...
They took a hiatus
I was all alone...
Deemed cured, I'm sure
was stamped somewhere
in my chart, upon the stacks
of psychobabble, jargon.
Fit to live in society,
with not much more
then a prescription
and a prayer.
I did the thorazine
shuffle out into
the world.
--
Now,I like to
play hide
and seek
with those little
capsules they
call a cure.
Except, I hide them
in the garbage
and the only
thing I seek,
is self-satisfaction
[It's a lot less lonely that way.]
Author notes
"Thorazine Shuffle"- The sedation effect combined with indifference to physical stimuli, anecdotally known as the "thorazine shuffle," has long been associated with the drug. The image of psychiatric patients staggering mute around a padded cell has earned those particular side effects a place in mainstream pop culture.
I chose to depict schizophrenia in my poem. I work in the mental health field, the most common downfall to recovery is patients not taking their medication.
I'm not happy with the title, but I can't think of anything right now.
A contest entry
- Condemned Minds by Acidanthra.
600 points, ended October 29, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me Everything you've Got by CrystalJet.
600 points, ended March 14, 2008, 318 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I really like the way you've described schitzophrenia, from what I know it is a really good description that brings you into the mind of the person experiencing it. It is a really unique piece with lots of good imagery and I like it. It's longer than some of the other poems I like, but unlike some it doesn't detract at all from the piece. I really enjoyed this, and don't worry I think the title goes great with the message represented here.
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I am so impressed! I want this part on my tombstone..."Fit to live in society,
with not much more
then a prescription
and a prayer."
Wicked Write. I loved it all.
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Out of the few writes I've read of yours, this is, so far, the best.
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