The times I have longed to do this
When I lived many miles away.
To close my eyes and drift like a dream
Back to the heat of a lazy day.
To be again with you in the place I love
And fill every sense of our being.
Sharing this perfect moment in time,
Enjoy with me all that I’m seeing.
Feel the sandstone warm upon your back,
Smoothed from years of winds and rain.
The breeze will ripple and cool your skin,
A sensation to banish our pain.
Let your ears listen to the song of the sea
As the rocks receive each small wave.
With the swoosh and hush as it rolls in and back
Never ending, a memory to save.
Smell the sea, the heat of the rocks
It has a special scent of its own.
Taste salt on your lips and savour it all.
To remember when you return home.
You can’t leave yet, let’s go for a swim.
Let the sea hold you like powerful arms.
The warmth caresses your body so gently
Like the ghost of a lost lover’s charms.
Now the sun is dipping down into the sea
We will now have to leave the shore.
Later we can dance and I'll hold you tight
And we will fall in love once more.
The dream is over, I'm alone and awake.
I can only return when I sleep.
They all said we were much too young
But after 40 years I still weep.
Never again can we sit in that place
Where my heart will forever be.
Malta has to go back into the past
But we‘ll always be there, you and me.
Author notes
Option 2
A contest entry
- Never Forget, Never Let Go by trista.
450 points, ended November 30, 2007, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All For Love. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended October 28, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [Hopeless] Dreams - Many Options by Athena of Starlite.
300 points, ended February 4, 2008, 11 entries
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A love that will not die after all these years. I have noticed that one of your loves is also the ocean and you matched this piece so beautifully with it. To grieve a lost love after 40 years is really really heartbreaking. The sea as your backdrop for the grief is something really breathtaking for it gives it the required feeling that you both once enjoyed.
Let your ears listen to the song of the sea
As the rocks receive each small wave.
With the swoosh and hush as it rolls in and back
Never ending, a memory to save.
My favourite verse which rings so loudly with the sound of the ocean and possibly the lost voices of love washed away. Thanks so much for sharing this treasure. Congratulations also on the gold trophy. -
"Now the sun is dipping down into the sea
We will now have to leave the shore.
Later we can dance and I'll hold you tight
And we will fall in love once more."
Oh, this is special! I'm glad I added you as a favorite...brilliant, simply brilliant!
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magic words.
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Tireseus, thank you for taking the time to read and comment, it is very much appreciated.
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Beautiful. I think when you really love someone, that never dies or goes away no matter how many years have passed.
Your poem is well written, has great imagery and other sensory involvement, which I love. The flow is good...not perfect, but very good. The ending is wonderful, and brings in the "wow" factor I always look for in poetry. I'm not a huge fan of starting every line with a capped letter, (even though I do it myself at times, go figure. lol) but you have enough punctuation to guide me through your thoughts, so that's great. All in all, very nicely done.
I think the emotion of this, very soft and subtle, wistful and even a little sad at times, is what really makes this such an enjoyable read. Thank you so much for your entry in the contest, and good luck. I really loved this.
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Oh Wow!!! This is without a doubt the most wonderful love poem I have ever read. I'm going to bookmark it so I can add it to my collection of favorites.
In answer to your question, Yes I have know that all consuming love for someone. It overpowers all thought of anyone or anything else.
Wonderfully written poem. Cathy
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Cathy, forgive me for taking a while to reply to your wonderful comments on my poem. I was off site for a long time and then it has taken me ages to catch up as I discovered the right way to thank everyone as I go through each of my poems.
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I am glad you liked it, thank you so much for commenting. Memories of a wonderful time in my life that never really ended. -
Love is the best-it's great to love and be loved.
Lovely write.
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Very nicely written for the chosen prompt, isn't love a grand thing? Great imagery and metaphors, i like this one a lot...Scott
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Griswold
Thank you very much for your kind comments. It is always so good to know someone has enjoyed what you have written.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
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This is beautiful ...
and I almost wish that I had written it. Young love or first real love is something that we just can't forget and your imagery reawoke my thoughts once again. Perhaps the sadness of not being able to go back is really the key to why we continue on with hope! I throughly enjoyed this one. joy
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Joy thank you once again for your lovely comments. I wrote this for my first love who has stayed in my heart all this time. He will forever be 20 and me only 15. One year together is all we had then the navy posted him back to the UK and he left with an 'almost friendly' warning from my Dad. I never saw him again.
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