You touch me and I sigh
You kiss me and I sigh...
You make me giddy with pleasure
You make me feel like I'm in heaven.
You make my body tingle
With just one touch
Come on now, don't be shy...
Just come make me your love.
I love you!
Author notes
exactly 50 words... and I don't know if this is really what you want... wasn't quite what I was going for, either way... hope you like... I did read the rules... I did my bestest...
A contest entry
- Passion: 50 words or less by Lj-.
300 points, ended November 8, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a delightful expression of the joys of being in love! I really like the playful tone, and it could stand out more with some fresh, unique metaphors. Overall, it sounds like anyone would love to have this written for him/her.
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Thank you!
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this is very good girl!!!!!! I really really do like it!!! keep up your amazing work!!!
Crimson Lovez ya! -
Hmm, I just don't feel the passion in this.
Thank you for your entry,
Best if luck.
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well i got this one!!! If I could have summed up my lover in 50 words it would have said this!!
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hmmmmm, not quite sure what my opnion is, it confused me a little.... but i got it.
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Something sweet in these sensations. It is phenominal our emotions translate into physical pleasure. There are no words, you are helpless to do anything, except... sigh! I think this is lovely, in 50 words!
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Thanks. you are the only person who has commented this... I forgot I even wrote this one... lmao.
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