Kiss me too fiercely
lead my life from my lips
unto yours
I can’t continue this way
let the birds sing me a lullaby
the wind pull me to sleep.
The strength of your touch,
your kiss,
can kill me so softly
take me, sweetly, to Heaven
the place we once
danced together without a care
before life tore us apart.
The soul that was once me
wont be missed
leave me hidden, in your thoughts,
don’t let the world discover me
[my secrets, my desires]
let them discover the eyes
that don’t see, but still have tears
keep me close though
-please
remember
me-
Author notes
inspired by:
allpoetry.com/poem/3356324
...Meg....
In a list
A contest entry
- 1-15 reserve your spot now!!! by danceswsquirrels.
560 points, ended November 21, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congrat's on the silver! I loved this piece
& I would like to thank you as well for taking your time to read through my poem and write this beautiful piece based upon inspiration.
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oh wow... I'm speechless.. I love the way you ended it... tying it to the prompt piece but keeping it your own... I'm serious.. I can't.. think of anything.. wow..
just one error... won't (wont)the punctuation actually changes what the word is.
You did an amazing job... I still... lack words to tell you how beautiful this is... write on poet!
Jessa
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Oh wow this was so beautifully written. I love your take on this from inspiration of my poem. Your words give off a serene feeling while reading. I love the imagery and ideas were wonderful. I'm glad to have inspired you to write a gorgeous piece. Good luck in my AP friend's contest!
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