Your amazing eyes
Looked at me softly
Giving me a promise of much more
And your radiant smile illuminated the sky,
On a dark night
As you had a way about you
That made your presence overwhelming.
I could feel your intense passion
With those sensual touches in the night
And what we had together was very special.
Just yesterday, I felt we were meant to be.
What’s happened to us?
Not long ago, I was your hero
Your best friend and lover,
And I could do no wrong.
Where did all the passion go?
Our Love was beautiful once upon a time
But now, you say you love me,
And yet the luster is not there.
It’s easy to feel love
When everything goes right,
But love is tested by adversity.
Somewhere within the chaos of life we fell apart
Now I feel trapped by a wall of pain
As my body and heart aches for your love once more.
Author notes
It is my opinion that passion and romance is a matter of the “will.” Feelings will follow. The so called “magic” in the beginning can be maintained if one wants it to by making the relationship a priority and doing something everyday to keep the passions’ intensity. Usually, however, people allow other things to get in the way. When a relationship starts, the couple puts each other first and does everything they can to please one another. Each person feels wonderful, on top of the world, but over time they allow things to get dull, mundane and boring. Often, there are misunderstandings, then hurt feelings and they allow this to diminish the “specialness” of what they once had. It doesn’t have to be this way. Many times men, once they get the girl, is an accomplishment and they move on to other challenges and the woman feels neglected.
A contest entry
- Emotion Sickness: Lost in the Currents by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended November 4, 2007, 19 entries
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obviously a man of experience. we could be the same person.
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wow
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my husband was my hero for so many years it all begins with the mind the will.. when congress was debating PTSD I knew they had it completely backwards with the Vietnam vet. Politics to veterans means quality of life. You are a wise and observant man. Probably wise enough even as little as you know me to figure out my ramblings=)
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I do understand your "ramblings" and like you said "it all begins with the mind the will" Thank you for reading an your comment.
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WOW... this is good. Not just GOOD but REALLY GOOD. This completely sums up how I feel at this very moment. Wonderful job
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Well, I am hoping that one day soon you will find a loving and committed relationship.
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One has to read this aloud, it is astounding and the flow is wonderful, I loved it. I applaud you.
Victoria
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Thank you Victoria. I just added some notes if you want to read it and perhaps give me your opinion.
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im confuddled... u say this person still loves you, true passion cannot last forever... at least not in the same way as the beginning of a relationship. a wonderful poem though and the flow is flawless,
hugs,
georgie,
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I’m not sure what you mean by “true passion.” It is my opinion that passion and romance is a matter of the “will.” Feelings will follow. The so called “magic” in the beginning can be maintained if one wants it to by making the relationship a priority and doing something everyday to keep the passions’ intensity. Usually, however, people allow other things to get in the way. When a relationship starts, the couple puts each other first and does everything they can to please one another. Each person feels wonderful, on top of the world, but over time they allow things to get dull, mundane and boring. Often, there are misunderstandings, then hurt feelings and they allow this to diminish the “specialness” of what they once had. It doesn’t have to be this way. Many times men, once they get the girl, is an accomplishment and they move on to other challenges and the woman feels neglected.
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Wonderful
I love your use of language. It really justifies the title, which is so true as well. It begins so beautifully and the turn is so skillfully constructed. Thank you. I greatly enjoyed reading this.
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Thank you Anthony.
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I like the calm presence that you have masterfully created in this piece. There is a vital truth to the title that you also explore throughout - a constant theme of your piece - the trials of love. Thank you and hope that you are well. Anthony.
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magnificent your very skilled.
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Thank you.
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beautiful and true, master poet
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Your emotions certainly came out with this one. Almost true to life in my opinion. Good work and a good descriptive piece. I appreciate you sharing this with us! Keep it up!!
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Heartache is not easy nor relationships. Than you for you comments.
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Such strong emotion in this piece, I really can relate. I felt that you used the words beautifully to unravel your story here.
Its hard where at some point in a relationship things change and it feels like the flames don't keeps themselves ablaze, you have to keep huffing and puffing to keep a spark alive...but its worth it for true love.
"But now, you say you love me,
And yet the luster is not there.
It’s easy to feel love
When everything goes right,
But love is tested by adversity.
Somewhere within the chaos of life we fell apart
Now I feel trapped by a wall of pain"
I love it. Great job!
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somewhere along the lines....someone begins to change...you just have to pray, that person knows your heart more than they know you're mind & vice-versa...otherwise everything else in one's mind gets jumbled & leads to confusion & miscommunication....been there.
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Heartfelt
It's a very beautifully written heartfelt poem... you spoke of the truth - love indeed is tested by adversity.. . we often forget as life happens, we need to show our love even more... with passing years it should grow but somewhere in the huddle we forget to water it with our compassion & harness from the hardships so it's eventually dies out in the coldness of our hearts... but then... I believe love doesn't fail, we often fail love, but with open heart & mind, it enters then just don't forget to nourish to bloom... great write... good luck in the contest... take care Minoo
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I am so so sorry, Oh, you are chasing the rainbow of many colors. Love is plain, try not look everywhere and forget to find it in you. It is a great piece of an ongoing thing. Keep your door open and love will enter when time is right
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Thank you for your comments.
In the English language we have the word “love” and we use it to express a sentiment to a person or object; for a parent, child or spouse and they are different. In the Greek, they have more words.
Eros is passionate love, with sensual desire and longing.
Philia means friendship
Storge means "affection"
Agape is an unconditional love and concern for others. Agape is a love that accepts everyone for who they are.
Ideally for a boyfriend/girlfriend or spouse, it would be all of these. Since we are not perfect, we love for reasons. It is called attraction. For men, it is often looks, for women it could be security.
When we love someone we become attached. As the bible says the two shall become one. So, when the love feelings are not there, the attachment is broken and there is pain. Many people quit when the feelings are not there, but this where commitment and the “will” comes into play and you “Agape” them.
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A very heartfelt write. Formed together very well
Love is indeed tested by adversity!
Thanks for sharing
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a true testament of adversity...
This is so heart-felt and genuine, Jeff. I hope that these painful walls come down in time. Don
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This is such a very heart felt write, oozing with a pain that lingers.. Very well written lines of sadness, drenched in a beautiful longing. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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this is beautiful. truth, in its purest form. well done.
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Thank you Abby.
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I like this on Jeff, It is very true that love is strong in the beginning. when everything seems to be doing good, when life gets rough, sometimes, it feels like the person that ones loves so much is slipping away. I can relate to the last 3 lines of this beautiful write more than I want to admit at times.
Somewhere within the chaos of life we fell apart
Now I feel trapped by a wall of pain
As my body and heart aches for your love once more.
you did a great job with this poem.
Kat
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Thats prombly why King David had so many wives, he kept thinking the last one didn't love him in the freashness of romance anymore...just my thoughts...Nice write!
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