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Halloween Night


Haunted house where Goblins are living
Angry Witches cooking in kitchens
Lilly white Devils sent back from hell
Living together and casting spells
On Halloween night children in masks
Wish for some sweeties to put in jars
Eager they were with flashlight in hands
Entering the house when the door slammed
Nervous and scary the children all screamed

 

Never been seen since last Halloween

If you should see them this coming night

Give them a pumpkin with glowing light

Help their souls escape from the darkness

This should teach them to stop trespassing.

Author notes

'trick' or 'treat'

Option 2 word bank Acrostic

"Hikaru"

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 23, 2008

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    Great job on this acrostic. They aren't always easy to do I know, I've done a few myself. This really sets the pace for Halloween.


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 17, 2008
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    Thanks for your entry

    Nice job on the acrostic. Good flow and very creepy and spooky. Definitely captured the spirit of Halloween with this tale.

    Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest and thank you for following the rules.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment



    Happy Halloween and God Bless
    Tammy


  • Florida Sunshine
    November 2, 2008

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    I love the acrostic style of the write. 1st captures my attention is the flow of the read ~ a little pushed on a couple of the lines in the rhyme ~ but its so subtle I don't think it is noticeable. ~ The overall write was enjoyable 'as' enjoyable as something like "lil' Orphan Annie" ~ one of my favorite poems.

    Thanks so much for entering the contest ~ I do however need you to put 'trick' or 'treat' in the Authors notes -- Although I'd put his under the 'Trick' Column. ~ I'm sorry it took me so long to judge the contest ~ I went away for a mini vacation and just got back.

    Florida Sunshine


  • owlish
    October 22, 2008

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    I don't really understand the rhyme scheme... but the acrostic is great, I love the descriptions... "Lilly white devils sent back from hell" and "Never been seen since last Halloween" are my favorite parts. Good job, and good luck in the contests!


  • Kappa Pyua
    October 17, 2008
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    Again, this is a very good poem put to an acrostic. Thx for entering again this year.

  • Warrior7
    September 30, 2008

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    Very, very good poem, rhyming is flawless and i must say it gave me the chills when i read the bit about the children not seen since last halloween .
    Excellent


  • Kappa Pyua
    October 31, 2007
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    defenately a scary story, and very well put to an acrostic which can be very hard. good work.


    • Timespell
      November 7, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

  • A floatingleaf silver member
    October 31, 2007
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    Love this write, tells the whole story...lol...leaf


    • Timespell
      October 31, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • mypassion
    October 30, 2007

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    Acrostic are my favorite, and this one is great..
    nice flow and awesome imagery from beginning to end..
    Thank you for entering and good luck..

    Brenda


    • Timespell
      October 30, 2007
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      Thanks for reading, It was fun building this to a finish.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 26, 2007
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    great poem good luck in the contes


    • Timespell
      October 30, 2007
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      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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