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Stone Cold Lover (Mississippi Delta Blues)

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Out on the sidewalk
Late at night
Lookin for my baby
In the neon light
Wonderin where shes going
Know where shes been
The wonderin and the knowing
Got my head in a spin

  (Chorus)

Yea shes my stone cold lover
With a heart of ice
Fell into her trap
No I didn't think twice
Walking the streets alone
Heart on my sleeve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve

Like oil and water
We just didn't mix
But she was my drug
And I needed a fix
She built me up
Just to slap me down
Yea I was her fool
I was her clown

Yea shes my stone cold lover
With a heart of ice
Fell into her trap
No I didn't think twice
Walking the streets alone
Heart on my sleeve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve

The tears she cried
I thought were for me
Kept me bound
In her misery
Her tears were an act
How well she played the part
She used and abused
And stole my heart

Yea shes my stone cold lover
With a heart of ice
Fell into her trap
No I didn't think twice
Walking the streets alone
Heart on my sleeve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve

I thought, love rained down
From clouds on high
But I didn't see
The lightning in the sky
The truth hit me hard
Like a thunder clap
She made me her fool
Played me for a sap

Yea shes my stone cold lover
With a heart of ice
Fell into her trap
No I didn't think twice
Walking the streets alone
Heart on my sleeve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve

She left my bed
On a warm summer night
To chase her dreams
In the neon light
She lives for fast cars
And the juke joint bars
And dreams of a day
When she'll be a star

Yea shes my stone cold lover
With a heart of ice
Fell into her trap
No I didn't think twice
Walking the streets alone
Heart on my sleeve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve
Forever and a day
Her love I will grieve

Author notes

This is a Blues Song, Slow and Emotional I could see
BB King or Muddy Waters doing it
Or it could be a rockabillie song, in which case I could see "The Stray Cats" doing it, at a slightly faster pace My inspiration for this song is "The Blues" I have been playing the Blues Harmonica for the past thirty six years. I started on the harmonica after my first love, (Who gave me my first harmonica) by the way, broke my heart. Over the years, my heart has been broken many times, which has enriched my muse not only musically but also poetically. So I guess to be a little more correct; my inspiration is the blues of a broken heart! They say that the blues is nothing more than a man feeling down about the love of a good woman, that he once had.


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  • Dryad Enya
    October 25

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    I see this more as a lullabie song, beautiful, easy going, someting you'd get on vynil and play over and over again every night and cry your self to sleep with. Elegant and deep not a better combination!
    Great work, you should be a song writter
    Dryad Enya


  • Debra A Baugh gold member
    October 15

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    very bluesy tune

    great tune......da blues it is......very bluesy......i could see bb king do'n this one.....it is very poetically written.......gr8 piece......love it.................love peace & harmony


  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    October 11
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    Great

    love the words an melody of this one, realy gets the toe tapping


  • Bluemonday silver member
    October 5

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    Being beaten up by your old lady!!!....The ancient story of the Blues...yeah...Dan


  • toomysterious
    September 23

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    Serious Blues here, enjoyed this immensely. Good to see you back and posting here. Hope to see lots more of you from now on. Great author notes, too. And very deserving of all those trophies.


  • black hearted rebel
    August 24
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    Excellent write


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    July 16
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    Such a singable blues tune Bluesman!
    I wanna hear this on YouTube next!


  • Antebellum
    July 10
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    wonderful lyrics.thanks for entering
    good luck

  • Antebellum
    June 23

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    Yea shes my stone cold lover
    With a heart of ice
    Fell into her trap
    No I didn't think twice
    Walking the streets alone
    Heart on my sleeve
    Forever and a day
    Her love I will grieve"



    LOVE! the chorus.
    wonderful song.


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    June 21
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    It was impossible to read this. It had to be sang. I loved it.


  • Ami
    June 20

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    Wow this is Awesome! I loved the chorus
    Do you always write lyrics? I'll have to check your other stuff out after the contest Great write loved it!!
    Thanks for entering and Good luck -♥Amy♥


  • malkinpuss
    May 31
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    Loved it!

    I really felt the emotion and could sing that there song!


  • PastelMoons gold member
    May 14

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    I love the blues
    Sing it often too
    these are great lyrics
    so very soulful!
    Thank you for entering
    and best wishes

    ~Pastel


  • AllexisReed
    May 6
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    I started tappin my feel every time I hit "Yea shes my stone cold lover"

    I was definately feeling that song! Do you have music with it? I wanted to pull up something by Muddy Waters and have it playing when I read it. Maybe I'll find the right beat and read/sing it again! This is great


  • awannabepoet
    April 21

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    I can see MR Downtime playing this on his blues harp or perhaps Lightning Hopkins singing this tune with his slow deliberate phrasing on that guitar.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • cgirl0410 silver member
    March 21
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    Wow, a song. That's different. Thanx 4 that. Thanx 4 entering. Good luck! - cgirl0410

  • toomysterious
    January 25
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    You definitely have the rhythm and the soul in this piece. It sings. Would wish you luck, but don't think you need it.

  • Aisades
    December 13, 2008

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    I was singing this along. You are a bad ass lyricist. I'd like to hear you record this blowing harp. I was listening to a Bonnie Raitt/Johnny Lee collaboration and this matched the rhythm pretty well. Did you ever record this?


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    September 24, 2008

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    This would indeed go well set to music. I like that it retains a poetic feel, which can be tricky with lyrics. Since it has been in other contests, however, it can't stay in mine. Please feel free to enter another, though.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    I can see that you did not completely follow the rules here. I believe the contest holder wanted each stanza defined by a Verse 1, Verse 2, etc... then Chorus format. Regardless, this is great work. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • God is my reality
    August 10, 2008

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    Oh this is so good. Yeah, I could totally hear it put to music. Great poem and good luck in my contest. I enjoyed reading this.


  • Folklor
    July 11, 2008
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    WOW LOVE THE RAP LIKE DITTY YOU HAVE GONG ON ITS FULL OF MOVEMENT AND POWER WELL DON


  • Redrusty66
    April 22, 2008

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    Awesome work, the flow and construction were so well done. There was ample room for personal perspective and interpretation as a good write should have. Great use of vocabulary and flow scheme. Thanks for the great read.


  • TimeLady42
    March 28, 2008

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    wow... I've never written blues before... It could be a challenge.

    I certainly like the feel that this has, though.

  • cirque du soleil
    January 9, 2008
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    looovely!!!! but a problem..could we replace the she's with the he's???we're a girl band (not a wimpy one though)...i loove this. really! i love the lyrics and the unusual song structure. i have a sort of slow rock idea for this, with a lot of bass...what do you think??


  • MysteriousMoonlight
    December 28, 2007
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    I love he coice and flow of the words and love it!good luck in the contest!


  • Shakespeare
    November 14, 2007

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    Guilty! of a good poem

    I like the flow of this. I cannot find anything that may need fixing. I reckon I'm a mere amatuer. One day I'll fill your shadow lol!


  • Wandering Spirit
    November 13, 2007

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    this is an incredibly well written poem. it was descriptive and had an excellent flow to it. thanks for entering this contest.


  • fairytalelovestory
    October 29, 2007
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    erm cool i digged this

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