my shivers write your music
line upon line of longing
recorded by pulse
nothing imitates your eyes
but in twilight's bittersweet loss
I feel your soft gaze
my soul weeps
Author notes
30 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Make me want MORE by Suzanne Dia.
1000 points, ended October 30, 2007, 27 entries
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In 30 words you've described perfectly what it means to be separated from the one you love. In this case brevity enhances the sad beauty of the piece. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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>:D
There is my Love
Music in timbre
Two Still One
Soon to return
Horses full gallop
Never less than a run
Hallo My Mine
How beautiful sings your soul, but no more saddness, no more fear, no more silence, Love can never truly disappear.
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That better be happy tears... I'm not accepting any others from youl... you are on timeout from sad tears... hahaha. Wonderful. You stretch words beyond their normal meanings to say things that can not be said.
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The things we perceive are at times beyond the matter that catches our eye. There are so many matters bigger than life, yet so often do our eyes stare while not being able to observe things that matter. I do however believe what you see matters because the perception from which you live, is a thing rarely seen in this plane. Wonderful, precious Muse and thank you for making me see what was hidden before. Ack,
Chris
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this ouches in just the right way, lady..
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