she is 5
going on 30-
feet, not years
which fall
the other way
round.
a towering pixie
with little girl
hands,
well travelled
in woman's work,
carrying care
for others but not
enough for self;
feet too small
for those giant
steps she walked
to get here
through low places
where a lack of height
drew all those
unnoticed things
to eye.
it confuses-
how someone that close
to the ground
can soar so high.
In a list
A contest entry
- body by Cat.
950 points, ended October 31, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
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this is quite exactly what i was hoping for in this contest- a travelling pixie with little girl hands.. just a nice little descriptive without being too much or too little
nicely done kate
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pixie impishness
i adored this
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nice images juxtaposition between heights. keeps the reader - me - pleased.
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Wow. wow wow wow. Kate, I love this one. Excellent writing. I wish I were you.
~Candy
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Oh i remember our conversation about this.
How your muse list is all about her
& her stunning 4"11.
this is great.
she must mean the world and more.
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Wow, what a cool way of expressing the towering presence of spirit ... that's really lovely
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liked the brevity of the lines - the flow and the images created through these words. Does size matter in anything? Well, nearly anything? LOL Most can do whatever they think they can if they try hard enough. Great ending verse. Good finale.
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damn.... purrdy stuff miss kate... damned purrdyyy
smiles....
lil' packages of dynamite
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just beautiful, the second stanza was my absolute favorite.
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I wish this was mine~
just brilliant work, my friend.
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Sigh
I really wish I could see myself the way you do.
In your words I am beautiful and strong.
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- I don't see how those words are not apt hehe
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