How silly a thing it is to do,
to strive and work and misconstrue
all the pretty words together
maligning them to something better.
Is it not enough to see
these words are happy as can be
when left alone to simply leisure
to entertain the reader's pleasure?
So, poets dear, why strive we thus?
It's something deep inside of us
that makes us feel the need to share
every thought,and word, and care
that come together in some verse
rather long or rather terse
(it matters little,friend of mine,
so long the meaning is sublime)
And so I wrote this poem for you
to show how silly all we do.
It's nothing more than word arrangment
to free the captive thoughts' incagement.
Author notes
*POD* Theme: Poem of the Day
A contest entry
- Poem of the Day ( 24 Hour Quickie ) by Arkbear.
500 points, ended October 27, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Bah, whoever takes a comical poem and turns it into an attack needs to learn to lighten up. This poem is not taking a "shot" at the POD contest, it is the opinion of the author. I personally loved this poem!
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Thank you very much for your encouragements. If my lighthearted poem offended you, I sincerely apologize. I would very much like to write again for everyone. I do fear, however, than many of my poems tend towards a carefree lightheartedness, which tends to bother more serious poets. I always believed poetry is an expression of soul, wit and emotion.
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I have very mixed feelings about this write. It starts out very lighthearted, but does have that element that could be taken as a shot at the POD contest...and that is a very risky thing to do.
I'll give the benefit of a doubt that this was not done with malicious intent though.
There are a couple of spots where you've missed putting a space after a comma. No point deduction, but something I still wanted to point out. The rhyming was very enjoyable and well done. Like Bear, I hope you'll join us again in future PO contests. I'd love to see a more serious write from your obviously talented pen.
Thank you for your entry and best wishes,
~J.
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Hmmmm ~
This is a great rhyming scheme.....but I can not help but to think this is a little attack on the work of a Poet and the POD ~
This is just my opinion of course ~
I found no humor in this at all.....call me Humbug ~
I do not feel in the least.....that this is to *show how silly all we do* as you so well stated ~
I personally have spent the past 6 hours Judging this contest, as I have a place in my heart for passionate Poets who *care* about what they write....how they write it....and the resoponse they will receive after someone else reads it ~
I am not here to censor your work....but I am here to say.....I feel this is not POD contest material ~
You obviously have a gift....so please, when you have a better subject to share with us, please join us again ~
Bear ~
Title 8.5
Flow 9.3
Depth 8.7
Theme 8.3
Feelings 8.5
Grammar 9.6
Presentation 9.2
Uncommonness 10
Sit & Ponder Affect 8.3
Ability to follow Rules 10
Bears Score: 90.4
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Very cute! Love the humor in this!! Good luck in the contest!
Sheryl
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This is GREAT!
lol...Best wishes in the contest. Although, the theme has been done...that might be your low points!
I think I shall remove my entry now!
*PEACE*
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A fantastic amusing write
Classic truly! Best of luck!
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