Sometimes when we meet in hiding,
I just wonder why?
Sometimes when we hide our cars,
The leaving makes me cry.
Often my mind tells me,
That this time will be the last.
Other times I can't stand the thought,
Of having you in my past.
After all of these years,
You would think that we could come out clean,
That it really doesn't matter.
Or at least that's how it seems.
I think it is time to tell,
The one's we are to leave behind.
That our love is here to stay,
And we hope that they don't mind.
A contest entry
- SOMETIMES: A word to use for this poem. by Angel Full Of Hurt.
666 points, ended October 28, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
point out grammar usage please
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quite powerful
and realistic. The situation is difficult to go through and you outline that well. No mistakes in grammar or spelling that I can see. If you are worried about it, that's probably a good sign.
Congratulations on your gold.
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Rhymying is excellent. Love is always eternal.
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Thank you so much yogi.
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So True
HAHA, I have to laugh because I'm kinda sorta going thru this right now so this one speaks light on my situation. Beautifully written...
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You are to young to be going through this lil one
Thanks
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Wow this is really good.
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Thank you angelwings i thought you would like it
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Good write
Yes their is love unseen at times where two feels its the only way . GOOD WRITE
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Thank you for your wonderful compliment.
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Sometimes when we meet in hiding,
I just wonder why?
Sometimes when we hide our cars,
The leaving makes me cry.
Often my mind tells me,
That this time will be the last.
Other times I can't stand the thought,
Of having you in my past.
After all of these years,
You would think that we could come out clean,
That it really doesn't matter.
Or at least that's how it seems.
I think it is time to tell,
The one's we are to leave behind.
That our love is here to stay,
And we hope that they don't mind
great poem no mispelled ones here except one of mine haha
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You are so silly bo peep
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