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Heartlightning

 

I live in a corner of your heart -

Blind, you meet my eyes
fingers flying
in abbreviated handspeak,
the air aswirl
with the sweet scent
       of night-blooming phlox

I watch from the safeness of your heart -

Small winged beasts
flit
their long tongues darting
mouth-feeding and sucking nectar
pollinating

locust trees, weavers of magic
and loathsome

      love spells

I touch the walls of your heart -

Hands set in amber
pale and pearly as desert rain
signal
along dark oozing pathways
burned now onto staring retinas -
(negative images
like black heat lightning)
and the world ablaze
       in lines of Braille

I seek the warmth of your heart -

Inside unfenced shadows
midnight stories
read in tremulous voices
(thin and sour as desiccated dill)
chalk layers and half-kisses
open
with the taste of nutmeg
summertime, and hope
                  deep inside

the unlocked cage of your heart






 

 



Heartlightning
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  • Danna Hobart
    November 11, 2007

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    I am not sure I like the lines in italics, but the rest is fantastic, so full of imagery and metaphor. I wish I had the time right now to read it about a hundred more times, because I think I would find something new and delicious with each re-read. But I have to go.

    Thanks for entering.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 5, 2007
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    Excellent write I really enjoyed reading it and i wish you the best of luck in the contest


  • rollingzen
    October 27, 2007
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    well done


  • MysteriousMoonlight
    October 27, 2007
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    This is soo good! "The unlocked cage of your heart" I love it at the end


  • Quill
    October 27, 2007

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    midnight stories
    read in tremulous voices

    my favorite two lines,there is a poem in those lines waiting to be written,good luck in the comp.


  • FindingFaith
    October 27, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this read. It's nice to find another good poet here. I really don't have anything critical to offer, enjoyed as is. Best wishes.


  • jo-el
    October 26, 2007
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    i've been waitin for you to write somethin new. and i'm not disappointed. welcome back


  • PerfectTonight
    October 26, 2007
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    Great imagery here...I could FEEL your words. Great job. Can't wait to read more!

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