i lost my love the day
i turned my back on you once again
i saw you in a different light
then it all seemed right
found once more sealed with a bolted door
love was whole all that was wanted was time together
all that i wanted was time together
you never said anything
now with limbs flalling
round and round
my body hits the ground
as you scream at me
screaming why you don't love me
all these reason's
i didn't realise
how you felt
you never told, never spelt
never took the time
the truth hit me like a sour lime
bitter and hurtful
in the deep cut the left from your words
heart bleeding out onto the floor
as you walk through that once bolted door
leaving me to die
dieing...crying...alone
soon after
a love laughter
you still feel
is this real?
you still love me?
know one is above me
why would anyone do this to me
cause me so much pain
for their own gain
selfish and horrid
i should of known...
what did you think???
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I see a lot of tenderness and sincerity in your words here. There are some deep thoughts and personal reflection infused within the lines that grace the page as well. I enjoy this particular style of writing and often utilize it myself. Thank you for sharing your work with us and welcome to Allpoetry. I hope you find us a friendly and helpful place for posting your works. If you need any help or have any questions, please feel free to contact any greeter here.
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emotional
well you can feel the sadnes in this i can sort of understand, i really like the lines
"heart bleeding out onto the floor,
as you walk through that once bolted door"
one thing i will say against this piece that there is a fair few grammatical errors in it aka, spelling mistakes, and the wrong spelling of a word for the place its being used for like "hole" when you should have used "whole", overall a good write and enjoyable to read, well done keep on writting and peace out -freedom of soul-
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