If she had known
his fingers
were soaking up salt
water and sand-stained
body parts
Dina might have went
all the way.
In a list
A contest entry
- Photo Prompt by Grunts Girl.
1800 points, ended November 4, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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love that last bit, though I'm not certain if I should be happy or sad. I think that's good, though.
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makes me feel the same way ... glad you liked it.
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makes you sit up in your chair...
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That effect is cool with me.
Thanks.
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oh this is fantastic
sand stained body parts.....
this was a wonderful line
and the whole feel to this
was a flavorful treat
soaking up salt...
you know i sit and look at this.. just stare...
and it goes so much deeper than what is here
there is more to soak up than just salt water!
thank you for this entry
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Thank you for the inspiration.
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excellent. If only we had the insight to see what was going on in other places...
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'if only' ... that has to be one of the most common utterances from the human mouth... lol
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isn't that the truth!
lol
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So effective~ this is excellent.
Raising the bar as usual, you bag.
kiddin, ya know I love you.
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lol lol
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wow very graphic well done
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Thank you.
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i havent seen the pic prompt for the contest ... and dont need to ... the D-series is fabulous and this, as part of it - is as Nic says, most powerful ... >> Gina
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Thanks Gina.
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Oh... what a stunning and powerful poem this is. Wonderful interpretation of the contest picture, Stacy... this one will stay with me... the "if's"...the "if only". Loved this one - and another great groet poem in the D-series.
~ Nicolette
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Thanks again Nic. I'm not sure why I'm back in this place... but at the moment I guess I'm just doing a bit of internal cleansing.
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