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Deliverance

I reach for her hand,
it is not there.
I reach for her face,
I do not see it.
I reach for her loving soul
and wings swell over me,
like the tides that guide the dawn
to a new world of hope,
and I am at peace,
in the deepest part of me.
Knowing I am adored.
Knowing I could love and be loved.
Knowing that the day will come,
when she will walk beside me,
guide my spirit to deliverance,
and take me home.

Knowing.....


Knowing.....

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POD

Topic: Patience





For you Ashley. My heart is yours........

A contest entry

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  • trista gold member
    October 27, 2007

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    Dang...I'm jealous too, but for different reasons than Bear. I have 4 contests going myself right now, and I would have loved to see this in one of them. Feeling inspired enough to write another? (Hint, hint )

    The depth of feeling in this is just amazing. This is a wonderful example of why poetry doesn't have to be abstract or loftily worded to have power and impact. I am not normally a fan of one word titles (even though I do it often enough, how hypocritical is that??? lol) but you chose exactly the RIGHT word, which makes this work so perfectly.

    From the beginning lines, one would never guess so much would end up being said here. And I, for one, love surprises like that.

    Thank you so much for your entry, and good luck!

    Best wishes,
    ~J.


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 26, 2007

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    Hey Bubba ~

    I was so shocked to see your entry here.....and now I have to be fair....crap!!!!

     

    LOL.....OK....let me just first say.....this is an extrodinary entry....as it has everything we are looking for in a PO' contest ~

     

    Imagery....feelings....emotions....vividness....an ability to draw me in....wanting more.....a very heartfelt write for Bellafly....yes....she's still my BellaFly...hehe ~

     

    I appreciate the fact that you kept this short and simple....as you poured so much of yourself out there in just a few short lines and showed us your heart.....a very big heart to boot ~

     

    Title....loved it....one of the best in the PO' contest ~

     

    You are a Master when it comes to showing.....truth...respect.....love.....and the soft touch of a man ~

     

    Geesh.....I'm jealous!!!!

     

    Nice entry Bubba...let's see how it scored in my eyes,

     

    good luck with this beautiful entry,

     

    Brother Bear ~

     

    Title   10

    Flow   9.8

    Depth   10

    Theme   9.3

    Feelings   10

    Grammar   9.6

    Presentation 9.9

    Uncommonness   9.4

    Sit & Ponder Affect   9.8

    Ability to follow Rules   10

    Bears Score: 97.8

    Good job David.....as I hope to see your tender Quill grace this contest again soon ~

  • TooRainbow silver member
    October 26, 2007

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    "I reach for her loving soul / and wings swell over me..." WOW! "Knowing..... / Knowing....." This is one of the most romantic works I have ever read! I'm not often swayed by love poetry, but I swoon at this! Fantastic job! (Ashley, you got a keeper there!) Good luck in the contest! Thank you for sharing this.
    Sheryl


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 26, 2007
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    Great read, I like the repetition, it works well here. Best of luck in the POD


  • HeavenScent4U
    October 26, 2007

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    Beautiful poem written from the heart. Full of emotion and hope and I know it's intension and I think it will serve it well. I know you hurt right now but know that everything will be ok Best of luck in the contest. Be well and be blessed

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