For my Papa,
How resplendent are the Lilies swaying nimbly to and fro,
What enchantment does their lilt bring in the meadow where they grow?
But oh the burning their petals blaze beneath the savage rise-
Wanting but a moments glimpse into the beauty of your eyes.
Oh what refuge mighty bluffs bestow on lucent grains of white,
For their shadows cast on those who crave its comforting respite.
Had they but known tranquillity such within your rugged hands-
All but warm forsaken footprints would be left upon the sands.
And what of the mighty oak that grows his branches thick and strong,
To marvel in the laughter of all the youth that swing along?
How very humbled he would have been this proud unyielding tree,
To have beheld my children’s smiles as they bounced upon your knee.
And though all God’s creations envy what they had seen in you,
They understand you leaving them as here your journey was through.
And as I walk remembering through those Lily fields of old-
I know your radiant spirit walks in meadows made of gold!
Love always-
Your granddaughter
Corrina
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Oh wow... this really reminded me of the poem called Two Trees by William Butler Yeats. It is one of my personal favorites and if you have never read it I suggest you do. This was a beautiful piece. It was well written with lovely word choice and imagery and a powerful yet not so intense message!
I loved it! By the way, Corrina is a GORGEOUS name!
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good write
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This was a really joy to read. I love the way you rhyme this poem. It reminds of the ones used in the old fashion English in a way. Like the sonnets Shakespere wrote you know. I like how you vocalby was used to make the poem sounded even richer.
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Oh what refuge mighty bluffs bestow on lucent grains of white,
For their shadows cast on those who crave its comforting respite.
what a beautiful picture you painted
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The was so beatiful and heartfelt. You have done a great job at expressing your feelings about your grandfather!! Excellent word usage and imagery!
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What a beautiful testament of love for your grandfather. I am sure he is smiling from heaven as we speak. The power of love is felt between each stanza and radiates from every word. Aloha to you and yours from out here in paradise...;-)
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Beautiful! The rhymes flowed well, the imagery was lovely, the word choice was perfect. Wonderful job.
The only part that rolled off the tongue weird for me was here:
"They understand you leaving them as here your journey was through."
Perhaps if you worded it "They understand your leavimg them as your journey here was through."
A simple change in where "here" is placed.
The rest of the poem just flows so well that that part sticks out to me.
Of course it's up to you. I hope that helps!
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very well written
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Such a touching write, I've recently lost my mother so this brings back memories I try to suppress to avoid the pain of loss, thank you for sharing such a heartfelt piece, helping to remind me there is beauty beyond.
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This is really beautiful! I'm so glad to see a new piece from you! have missed your poetry! This was a really stunning and sweet poem.
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