One, two,
Lowered in the ground.
"I love you too."
The most persistant of sounds
Three, four,
Slowly the body wastes.
"You've opened a forbidden door."
Make haste, make haste!
Five and six,
Seven and eight,
Dancing on the river Styx.
Heaven can just wait.
Nine and ten,
This is the end.
Of life
Of love
Of it all
Fin
Until it's brought back up, that is...
Author notes
Yeah, basically.
What do you think, what do you feel?
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Very thought-provoking.
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This has a lil rhythm to it---love it! I was kinda bobbing my head as I was reading it, haha.
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This is a great poem. Hope you write more like this.
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Awesome!
I love this poem! It's well written and has good flow. My favorite part would have to be this:
Nine and ten,
This is the end.
Of life
Of love
Of it all
Fin
I like the darkness in it but it's also light and simply put which works really well.
Good job with this and good luck in teh competition!
The Black Poet
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Delightful!! Well done!! Brava!!
The lilting rhythm here becomes a duet as well with the lyrics a pleasure to read
Thank you for sharing this beautifully scripted write
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors!
~Myst~
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Beautiful! It had a good meter that fit with the counting, and title. A great poem with a great ending. To me, about how music is life, but I'm a musician...
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