So much time passes by we don't know where it went
We used to be happy and loved without fear
But now our hearts are sad, broken and bent
No more do we want each other near
You hurt me, I hurt you but we can't forgive
Hateful word exchanged our lips
I fear you've found another to try to relive
Tears of mine fall, drips, drips
We thought we could make this crazy idea work
It started out fine but now we both hurt
I was mean and you were a jerk
But I was not the one who liked to constantly flirt
Time passes by we don't know where it went
That's all I have to say, thanks for letting me vent
Author notes
Option 3
leslielovesthomas - teenagefailure contest Option 2
It's a sonnet. 14 lines (ABABCDCDEFEFGG)
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Comments
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Interesting, I find sonnets really hard to write, they're one of the worst types of poetry to write in my opinion but I love reading Shakespeare's sonnets, and others, a lot...
Well done on this, thanks for entering and good luck! =) -
i like this, what a great poem
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please put your rhyme cheme in the authors notes this is a lovely poem tell me how you did it.
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I was mean and you were a jerk
But I was not the one who liked to constantly flirt
Was my favorite part, its kinda like OH WHAT NOW!!!
Great job! Good luck in my contest! Please put yopur opition number in the AN. Thanks.
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i liked this.good luck
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this was very good i enjoyed reading this
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I loved the lines:
"Tears of mine fall, drips, drips
We thought we could make this crazy idea work
It started out fine but now we both hurt
I was mean and you were a jerk
But I was not the one who liked to constantly flirt"
The way you wrote this poem, it feels like you were telling a story. Grammatically it could be better, but the rhythm and depth of this was beautiful. -
An emotive and heartfelt piece. This had a lot of heart and depth to it. Thanks for entering and all the best in the contest!
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