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Spider Web

Suspicious of the web
Weaved beautifully and simply
Yet still entangled
The escape will be easy,
But Scars will remain

Avoid the webs;
Run the opposite way
Cover the scars
So no one can see,
And kill the spiders

Author notes

Webs are the lies told by guys, and the spiders are guys.

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  • Lyre-Bird-
    February 11, 2008
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    This is a good piece you have written....
    The concept of using the spiders and webs to represent life is great....
    the only suggestion is I find it a little cliche with some of the wording, but besides that...
    well written

    keep your pen flowing
    Tracey


  • Ringside
    February 7, 2008
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    Interesting write. Yeah, there are a lot of webs and spiders in life. Thank you for sharing.

  • Eusebius
    January 17, 2008

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    bravo

    Ah, but those "spiders" are often so irresistable! but I will try...so succinctly and deftly done! bravo... bravo.. bravo...