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Raven

Dark feathers ruffle
Shadows flutter overhead
Chilly breeze
Step forward
Gravel crunch
Spreading of wings
Webs of coal
Descend downy netting
Trapper of air and light
Up the black smudge
Essence of darkness
Rise aloft
Skim the delicate current
Tear the silken strings of daybreak
Eyes of prayer turn upwards
Beware
The raven flies at dawn

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  • Danna Hobart
    October 4, 2008
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    Thanks for entering.


  • trekkergirl
    September 28, 2008

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    oooohhhhhh ravens. I always think of ravens as evil little creatures. Dunno why just do. Good scarey write.


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    The ending had a very nice closure feeling, although the pace of the poem overall seemed too fast, if that makes any sense. Maybe it's just the way I'm reading it. Anyway, good imagery and lovely ending.
    Jeanette*~


    • Mirrors shard
      October 25, 2007
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      Thanks!

      Hey thanx for the comment...i will see what i can do about the too fastness...