Sin's superficial serenade
sensationalizes sinister snarls,
smothering sweet simple smiles.
A contest entry
- Alliteration Quickie by 2lullabyhaven.
425 points, ended October 26, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good alliteration quickie Pamela. Congrats on the Hm and thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much. This was fun to do.
~Pamela 
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You are in your element with alliteration Pamela and this is a fine example, very intelligently crafted - I expect no less of you! My reading of this was much the same as David's below. Therefore, whilst I love the sound of 'smoldering sweet simple smiles' 'smothering sweet simple smiles' would have worked better for me within the context in which interpreted the piece (which may well be completly wrong!)
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Dean
Thank you. AND AGAIN, you are spot on! I'm changing it. LOL. Thank you so much. 
~Pamela
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Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
Pam, Kudos I say for the maestro on this Superbly Sublime piece that you penned in only the way that you can. You put a huge smile on my face with these words. Even though it speaks of the masks in our society it still rang loudly with the beauty of your pen. I am always taken aback by your words that flow so effortlessly and elegantly. Congratulations on the honorable mention and thank you for sharing another of your masterpieces with all of us. You are as I have said so many times, AMAZING! Love you my friend, Joyce
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Joyce
You are always so kind and supportive with your comments. Thank you so much for your wonderful support and keep observations. 
I am so pleased for your comment here. Thank you. ~Pamela
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great job
This was a tongue twister for me but I got through it. Your work is always amazing to me> My favorite line is smoldering sweet simple smiles. I had trouble saying sensationalizes sinister snarls. But i wouldn't change anything about it.May your words keep floating like a swan on the lake.
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spanishsrose
Thank you so much. You are much more than kind with your lovely comments. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Simply sensational, wow, thanks for your entry into my contest lol
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2lullabyhaven
Thank you so much for your kind comment and the HM on this piece. What a great contest and so many superb entries. It was fun to just read them and enjoy. Thanks again. I am thrilled. ~Pamela
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I agree this does jump out at you with such short verse very profound indeed,
as always a joy to stop by your page.
Blessings,
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Tearz
Thank you so much. I am pleased you liked this little piece. 
~Pam 
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Wow!!! This jumps right out there to grab the reader's attention and doesen't let go!!!
Wonderful piece. I enjoyed it.
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cathy
Thank you. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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What an intelligent observational piece on the sublimal seduction of the sinful and sensational media at the expense of the soft and simple and serene things in life. 'Sins superficial serenade' by itself is an amazing phrase. Best of luck in the contest with this fabulous little poem.
David Michaels
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David
Thank you so much. I did enjoy writing this one and appreciate your kind words very much. ~Pamela
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kickin'...the opening three words would make a great title-can i use it-.lol.just kidding...amazing alliteration...intoxicating imagery!
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aliceramone
Thank you so much for your kind words on this piece and Congratulations on your trophy. ~Pamela
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