behind these tear dried eyes
hides a man in his disguise
a man loosing sleep over a girl
a girl who means his world
he hides the best he can
everyday he thinks up a plan
to get through the day alive
but its not easy to survive
shes all he thinks about all day
and at night he cries it all away
he dreams what most people cannot bare
dreams that slowly shift into nightmares
he wakes up freezing, shaking cold
he needs someone there to hold
he screams her name into the night
but hes alone, afraid tonight
Author notes
"my secrets"
A contest entry
- Secret lies Behind the eyes by Irish-Maiden.
315 points, ended November 10, 2007, 10 entries
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300 points, ended November 2, 2007, 29 entries
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beautiful...
that's enough right?
~kassie
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its a great write, the meaning behind it is common, but well used in this poem... the only thing i could complain about is the rythm... it seemed a little rough off the toung to me, but otherwise it is a great poem, i did really like it
~Nick
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:)
This is extremely sweet
A great write and read
It would be better if it was slightly longer
As im sure many would love to read on
The rhyme and concept were both brilliant
<3 -
Wow, nicely and kinda creepily scary. Sorry for the loss..
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Love it! Thank you for entering and good luck!!
Leslie -
An expressive write. Touching showing you feel this way
Good job with the rhyming
Thank you and Good Luck
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