From afar he was the picture of youth and life,
A demeanor all free of grief and strife.
His charming debonair smile,
Bade me to gaze a while.
His stride so sure and stable,
And my infatuation did he enable.
With his fresh skin like buttermilk,
His suave hair of spun silk.
Then suddenly, in my direction he did move,
His rich laughter so quick to sooth.
The inevitably increasing flutter,
Of my embarrassingly silly stutter.
He sang to me his serenade,
So eloquently verbose.
Yet, oh how I was so naively dismayed
To find tis' only a Masquerade,
Like cyanide laced sucrose.
As the distance closed between us,
The realization was instantaneous.
And I became quickly un-mesmirized,
By his yellowed white and watchful eyes.
I felt an unsettled and alarming unrest,
Ensued by the stalking gait he now suddenly possessed..
And the eerie way his skin wrinkled and shifted,
and complected a color completely insipid,
as it rippled and dimpled, like a material unsown,
Almost as though it were not his own.
With a wave of hot and putrid breath,
And the stink and rot of demon death.
He approached as a predator out for the take,
Uncaring of what innocence might be at stake.
A contest entry
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Comments
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this is great
it's soothingly dark
it's dark but sensual at the same time
i absolutely loved the wording in this poem, your vocab is great
the emotions were strong, hidden within the depths of the darkness of poem
it was a truly great write
thanks for entering and good luck
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This is freaky! I totally had had my hair standing reading this piece. You really captured alot of detials in this. I just love scary poems with rhymes in them. I don't know why I think they're even more scary!
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This is a great poem. I love the imagery in the poem. I am fairly new to the site, can you give me some tips on how to write great poems. The only poem of mine that I think is good is called "A Loving Mom"
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Wow this is really good, Starts out great then turns evil.
Great usage of words and great imagery here
I like this part
Then suddenly, in my direction he did move,
His rich laughter so quick to sooth.
The inevitably increasing flutter,
Of my embarrassingly silly stutter.
The content of it is pretty good but some spots kinda make you have to go back and read again
Great poem though I enjoyed reading it Keep up the excellent writes
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