I didn’t want
to kiss you
but I wanted
to feel
loved
where warmth
kisses
the heart
blessing
my heart beat
with serenity
to add beads
of sunlight
upon my days
To recal feelings
of my heart
at her best
when I felt
like a rose
in someone's
arms
cherished
held
tenderly
sweetly
kissed
Oh,(sighs)
I didn't want to kiss you
only wanted
to feel
loved...
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This is loely. I love your wording and flow. The image of a rose in someone's arms was also very lovely. However, you repeated yourself at the
beginning a little:
"I didn't want
to kiss you" -
"where warmth
kisses"
"the heart
blessing" -
"my heart beat"
It's not too bad, just a little something you might want ot look into.
Mybe you could relpace the second 'kiss(es)' with 'embraces', and the 'heart beat' bit with 'its rhythm.' Just my opinion...
Other than that, this was beautiful. -
wow i like this on
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cute
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oh my, I did enjoy this one, makes me think of the guy I was hanging out with ,lol..good luck to yo
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Very sweet and touching. Holds a lot of truth in your words...we just want to be loved when it is all said and done.
Lovely take on the picture.
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verry interesting but also extreamly true. I really like it!
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awwwww had that feeling also. nice to have and share.
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oops...
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awww.. this was so pretty... it was like.. a whisper.. I felt a slight tingle while I read it.. as if it was the softest thing I've read today... wow.. thanks for sharing!! ohh and good good luck!
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This is Incredable.... It's beautiful. Many people feel like this but dont wanna say it out loud.
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