The first time I saw you, I was amazed at
How you took over my mind. You were my
Only thought, everyday, all the time.
Many months pass, we become friends
And slowly turn to lovers wanting to
Spend the rest of our live together!
Author notes
a short acrostic about my b/f
Option 1 - Gimme Love
leslielovesthomas - teenagefailure
okay...
leslielovesthomas - ap name
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leslie
how bout drunken cousin first if not that then sister.
A contest entry
- A Kimo AP Family! by Kimojuno.
552 points, ended November 8, 2007, 2 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Awwh! Cute!! My favorite part is Many months pass, we become friends
And slowly turn to lovers wanting to
Spend the rest of our live together!
Its adorable!
Great job, good luck in my contest!!!
-Erin Lynn
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"And slowly turn to lovers wanting to
Spend the rest of our live together!"
'life' or 'lives' would fit better there I think.
I enjoyed it and thank you for entering, I can hear a guitar in the background while a woman (I suppose a woman's voice would fit better here) singing this lightly and soft to her lover who is listening and watching intently as she sings.
Great job and thank you for entering,
Kimojuno (Jeff). -
Very nice poem this is what happenend to me and my husband we worked together He was a bartender i a cook
Great acrostic -
Wow, okay I cannot do acrostics to save my life so for that you deserves some major props. And it sounds like Thomas is a dream, what I really liked though was you really wouldnt have noticed it was acrostic. It wasnt akward at all and that is something I find most people run into.
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nice outcome
the passage of time can be beneficial . . leads you along in the poem . . friends and lovers can be great . . good luck in the contest . . nice job !!
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