The queue was not at length as long as mine,
I therefore joined in hope I would be quick
it withered slow as those behind like twine,
would stay in theirs to forage super slick.
As luck would have it rain scattered before,
I left the house, umbrella had I gripped,
was needed not, the sun was set to soar,
and tightly wrapped became my ill equipped.
Bus was late, I walked the next stop down,
I turned around in hope that one was there
but closer than I thought, the bus to town,
was lightning fast, it was a brief affair.
and if, by not amused, the toast I made,
was evenly donated brown, and more!
A finely spread outrage of marmalade
fell face down. It's now a messy floor.
Then just my luck the ladder outside weight,
against the wall that was determined fuss
that walking underneath it would be fate.
presumed it was unlucky, MIND THAT BUS!
A contest entry
- MURPHY’S LAW [Lotsa Points and Fun!] by Poetic-Theorem.
950 points, ended November 4, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh My Word!!
Loved how You weaved Your words and the last line
Yep....that Murphy's Law
Congratulations on Your Trophy win and
Love the rhyme You have versed
When I saw that woman go under the ladder...
I cringed and went...
is that a crack she just stepped on too
j/k...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Keep that quill dancing!
Best wishes to You
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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This is a wonderful piece you have written here and I do believe in Murphy's Law. I have not been one for superstitions in my life. That probably sounds a little silly seeing as I do believe in one and not the other. How about having the bus go through a puddle and splash you as you run for the stop, only to miss it anyway. lol Thank you for sharing this. You gave me a big smile and some funny memories came to life through your images. Keep writing poet.
seamaiden ♥
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Brilliant!!!
Titus,
Fantastic write! Your choice of words are so superb and the flow of the poem is very smooth.
A pure pleasure to read.
Deep thoughts run through my mind after each stanza. A mixture of humor, drama, suspence, wanting to know more. What more can a reader ask for
The last stanza really brings this piece home;
"Then just my luck the ladder outside weight,
against the wall that was determined fuss
that walking underneath it would be fate.
presumed it was unlucky, MIND THAT BUS!"
Very well penned!
Additionally, I love the image you chose from an era that I love as well. However, your words shows me the picture making this a brilliant write indeed!
Thank you for your entry and I wish you the very best in the contest!
David
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This was an amusing story! And very true, luck comes always in a row of events.
Thanks for the fun
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Great photo from one of my favorite eras, and of course the poem is out of this world poet.
Judy
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the title reminds me of my love life. anyways this gots it going on. its so.....i don't know what, but its good.
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