>you can just walk by
and shivers run down my back
>you can just look my way
and my heart skips a beat
>sometimes i have to take
a deep breath
>to realize where I'm at
I get so lost in you
and just the things you do.
>when I think of you I float away
into a world that no one can see
>you can just walk by
and my heart flutters
>just the sound of your voice
brings me down to my knees
>every night i'm wishing
can't you be with me?
A contest entry
- What Is Your Fantasy? by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended March 27, 2008, 7 entries
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Comments
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Thank you for entering my contest. This is a well written poem, but I feel the inconsistency with the capitalization detracted from the poem a little. In one place you used I'm and another you use i'm.
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interesting
i like it but its more like a chapter in a book ya know...it really good but add more feeling and put tons of emotion in it....love ya
-Kay
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