She was there
again today
...she's always there
standing alone
by the grave.
pale, wan,
her eyes
too melancholic
she looks so sad.
I'd wanted
to reach out.
touch her.
to talk.
but, those
damp
mist filled moors
had always seemed
to stop me.
yet..
somehow
today felt different
and I whispered
'hello'.
[afterall what harm
could it do?]
through the chill
she
breathed
You're here again.
you're always here,
I wondered
when you
would speak
and if you
saw
...see,
anything
familiar
about me?
her reply
was so direct
It made me feel
quite cold
inside
I wasn't
sure
that she
would even see me
let alone
begin to
understand
any of it..
as I paused
for a moment
to reflect
our eyes met.
yes, she knows.
she knows.
she knew
...and
I her too.
It's been
a long
time.
[spooked]
Author notes
71.
A contest entry
- The Show Must Go On: Round 2 of 5 INVITE ONLY!!! by Willowhaunt.
450 points, ended October 31, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - True Enigmas... by NuraSkye.
600 points, ended November 23, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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750 points, ended January 18, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Help Me Celebrate 600+~ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
525 points, ended May 12, 2008, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Whatever..just make it good. [astonish me] by borrowing.moonlight.
1000 points, ended June 30, 2008, 160 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - VAMPIRES POETRY & STORIES by ennovy.
700 points, ended March 17, 31 entries
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Comments
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What a intresting write in to form of conversation...I enjoyed this read...Thank you for entering our contest...Novy & Brazos
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Beautiful poem, so mysterious. I love how you tell a story, yet make it so poetic.
Thanks and good luck in the contest! -
A good work.
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wow...
i mean WOW.
that is amazing
wow.
theres nothing else to say, is there?
wow. -
let alone
begin to
understand
any of it..
as I paused
for a moment
to reflect
our eyes met.
yes, she knows.
she knows.
she knew
wonderful poem good luck in the contest oh and congratulations on all of your shinys
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this is good, but which one is it and where is the phrase I asked for. since this doesn't seem to be option 21 from my contest
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I think it's a very nice depressing poem. That is not meant as an insult. I think you did a great job. Well done and good luck
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Totally beautiful.
Just really strong, made me want to cry and it's just so full of a lot of emotions, even though it's about death it's so peaceful. -
Wow, this was kinda eerie and mysteriously sorrowful. I especially like the ending. Thanks for entering my contest!
Blessed Be,
~Evolet
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This is awesome Congratulations on the previously won trophies.
Thank you for entering in to my contest.
I wish you the best of Luck.
RedwingSpirit
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Blankscreen2222 Excellent piec Dear Congratulations on the trophies I thank you for entering my contest I wish you the best of luck
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Thank you for entering my contest!
this was a really strong piece, its simple language added to the ghostlike atmosphere created, especially with moor line, i just felt the puncuation was inconsistent and ruined the poem, it shouldn't really, but if the reader notices it...
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Hmm... I liked the poem overally but I'm not too happy about the cliffhanger. That's not to say it wasn't a wonderful poem, because it was. That's just to say that I want to know who the girl in the cemetary was! Either way it was a great write and I liked the general flow of it. It kept me interested. Great Job and Best of Lucl.
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Thanks for the read
I enjoyed the work, thank you for entering the contest, I am sorry I did not have enough points to award to everyone, next time i hopefully will. I truly enjoyed the mystery behind the woman in the cemetary...who did you intend her to be? I feel like this poem was a cliffhanger, but it kept my attention easily. THANKS AGAIN
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Congratulations on the gold,richly deserved!
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Hmm, who is the girl and how do you know her. The questions left unanswered by this poem drive me mad almost. Its a great poem. though some of the longer lines seemed a bit clunky.
Good Job, Bravo, and good luck with the contest. -
i don't get it....
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no
not for this contest -
Congrats on this bronze trophy. However I am not a fan of this style of poetry and you didn't follow directions. Maybe next time.
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Quite unique.
This is a different sort of poem than I have read before. It intrigues me, I wonder if the person in this might be an ancester, or possibly yourself in another life. At any rate whatever it is refering to it is very interesting, and goes well with the theme of the contest. I enjoyed reading it good luck in the contest.
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Haunting, dream-like write. I love it!
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Spooky! I love it! Very suspenseful...I can't tell if the girl is dead or the narrator is...very well done! Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
Keep Quilling,
Whiskey
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This is a beautiful piece.
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