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she was always late
to weddings & crucifixions,
back when falling
up mountains
was easier than climbing.
 
not as lucky as Him-
her cross a strange
bed, for easy sleep
 
as wild dogs howled
beneath sheets too hungry
to let her rest well.
 
then Mary Magdalene came:
hair flaming over shotgun
lips; with a pension
for drama & needing
to know all the right
questions
 
but only one answer.
 
she came for the resurrection,
settled with a kiss-
her mouth a flood,
drowning all chemical
instinct:
 
mother
 
never said sleepwalking
could be like this,
 
how sweet smells of salvation
could offer damnation,
 
both welcome.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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Drawn from the memory of someone important - not because she survived, but because she begins to understand ... she was always relevant.

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  • Suzanne Dia
    April 28, 2008

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    This is still .. just so fantastic, Kate.

    I'm so glad you wrote this.

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 1, 2007
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    I'm so glad this snagged gold
    you took a really painful memory
    and softened the edges

    you gave it beauty

  • Rowan gold member
    October 28, 2007

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    "mother

    never said sleepwalking
    could be like this,

    how sweet smells of salvation
    could offer damnation,

    both welcome."

    Loved that. I read this one a few times.
    I'm so glad you entered, my friend. Made my job tougher, but I welcome that.
    You have a sense of style to your poetry that is uniquely you.


  • AshliiAsphyxiation
    October 25, 2007

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    wow!
    this is truley amazing darling.
    its brilliant.
    "back when falling
    up mountains
    was easier than climbing."
    i love that part!

    xxx


  • Exodus gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    God this is amazing.
    It's different from a lot of your writes, your descriptions are not the same (but no less brilliant). This had a very unique feel to it, something I've only seen in a few of your pieces.
    I've gone back and read it so many times. I love it


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 25, 2007

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    a mountain cant be a mountain if it werent for the valley below....
    on the surface of this is you...
    a complete you.... for some reason though you feel incomplete... i feel you in this complete..
    does that make any sense?

    wonderful


    • EvilKate
      October 25, 2007
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      It does indeed - though the poem was written from a memory recounted by someone else - that 'someone', you could say is beginning to complete me


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    I love that opening stanza - such a strong write this is, excellent imagery and tone in this One to read more than once, for sure


  • TheRamer
    October 25, 2007

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    i like this... i like this alot... i love your writing style, the way you describe things, and your structuring! just a spectacular piece!


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    some deeper thoughts and meanings here and the style is wonderful, a sense of letting it out...so very well done...PK


  • Marctheman
    October 25, 2007

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    I love this piece, to me self importance is the key to anything, it does not matter what others think of you, but what you think of yourself is what make you wake up every morning, and take on the task that lead you one step closer to where you want to be, with out knowing you, what you capable of doing, what your goal is, what your desire is, then you will be stock, and left with no place to be, this is a very important piece, that speak the soul, for that i will say good luck in the contest.


  • ChinNoy
    October 25, 2007
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    Amaizing Write and Good Usage of words as well

    i think that the person might be yourself or might be someone really close
    really good work though keep up the good work and thanks for sharing


  • Gods-Artgal
    October 25, 2007
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    This is a very good poem.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    this... this..

    i cannot find words yet... i will, but not yet.. the gulp and lump in my throat is vivid and red

    i shall be back

    beautimous work Kate.... really strong girl!!! damn yes


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 25, 2007

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    Very Beautiful Write Very good imagery This piece is like you were standing right there in the midst of things. Good Job with this and good luck in your future writes


  • layla.
    October 25, 2007
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    Brilliantly beautiful> kinda like yah! Love yah hun!
    -Esha♥

  • Suzanne Dia
    October 25, 2007
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    I think maybe I know where some of the inspiration for this came from, and if not, it could have.

    It's like you were there
    spooky - yet comforting at the same time.

    How do you DO this??



    It's beautiful, kate

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