Calm floats down, particulate;
Swathing and muffling our voices,
It settles, calm as midwinter.
Author notes
Does 'down' count as a place? If not let me know and I'll adjust it to be more specific.
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Could I get rid of any 'needless' words, or do they add rhythm?
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Interesting piece, I like the twist you made on the form. It still works. I loved, "Swathing and muffling our voices," as a clothing of Calm. I read this almost as Calm being personified as a bird. haha. Ok I have a vivid imagination. I think it may be based on the words swthing and muffling sound and the choice of "it settles." Good write here.
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settling calm like dust particles. I like this; it's evocative. I wondered if particulate needed an "s" - I am reading it like calm particulates - down is a good place to be when calmness takes you there.
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