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My Dying Garden

I'm so happy..

Nothing can stop me now..

I'm on a roll this time..

I made my decisions..

I got what I wanted

She knows what it's like to be free too

I'm free

---{"""I'm...free?"""}---

I can run through the fields

scream with rustling leaves

make peace with itsy-bitsy bugs

Talk to a rock and give a tree a hug

My hair flies through the breeze

content fills the soul

this is fantastic

+++This doesn't last forever+++

I can tell that there's nothing wrong

not a single care in the world

until the bloody day

where the poisonous clouds fall

My flowers wither

Sunflowers to cinders

weeds grow in the my garden

Eden-- no less

((( continue )))

I can't breathe

I can't run

I'm held to the ground

by withered and broken thorns

Now what's happening

everything was perfect

what did I do..

to make this happen?

^V^V^ A~L~O~N~E ^V^V^

Will I ever see my garden again

watch them grow together

do I want this to happen

I don't want to be stuck here forever

I want to move..

I want to be..

it's just too bad..

that I can't see.

I can fight

But I will not win

I can stuggle

but I will not break

I can suicide

but I don't have the will

 

plants.. please.. grow.

 

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  • Vienna110
    November 7, 2007

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    wow

    this is very good and i like it a lot there is a lot of emotion and you can feel it overall this poem is pretty amazing.


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    October 29, 2007

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    this poem shows me you have good talent!

    Starting at the age of 12 and writing such a nice poem? don't mess with 12-year-olds these days...they may be young but smarter than 41-year-olds lol..anyway, keep writing...i hope you could enter my contest because seeing as u can write...i think you could have a chance in winning...well maybe ..only if you enter...anyway...keep writing...

    This doesn't last forever+++


    I can tell that there's nothing wrong

    not a single care in the world

    until the bloody day

    where the poisonous clouds fall


    My flowers wither

    Sunflowers to cinders

    weeds grow in the my garden


    I like this part..shows how a beautiful garden can suddenly die...so we must take care of it...just like our bodies...we can have such energetic and wonderful bodies but if we don't take care of it...it'll die as well!