Until
You can't understand grief
until you experience sorrow
You can't understand abuse
Until you experience physical or emotional trauma
You don't understand chaos
Until you experience drama
You can't understand depression
Until you walk in sadness believing you're less than not willing to live
You don't understand sacrifice
Until you give you give up things that are precious
You can't understand forgiveness
Until you're ready for change
You don't understand mistakes
Until you realize nobody's perfect
You don't know what it means to be grateful
Until there's something or someone taken away
Until you live life through experience
you don't know what something is like
Please tell me what you think
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I like this one too
because many can come across strong to have not experienced certain things in one's life.
Love the concept of this.
ephiphany
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Great poem, structure and all. I think the idea is good with merit, though you used absolute terms that don't seem to really hold up. (you don't...untl...) when there are other very valid 'until's that could be substituted. I don't know, just my mood I suppose. Thanks for posting.
Arsenic-
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wow yeh full on, and it"s all very true, (even if you skip line 1 and read on from there, which is pretty cool) that in the experience of tragidy you understand, (and yet avoid its addiction) alike our teachers and gods play a fateful game with our memories and the lessons and the positives we draw from them, and so wiser for it able to break free...
anyways thanks for sharing this it was quite inspiring and different,
w orange juice and mangoes
-jas
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well written, non-specific litany of our faults, and hope in the overcoming of them. I wonder why you changed from "you can't" to "you don't" though. My favourite part was "you don't understand chaos until you experience drama"
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The most obvious, typo in the title.
Other than that I think it was pretty well written, and about a good universal theme. I liked how you kept from using actual incidences, allowing the readers mind to fill in their own experiences. I think that was a much better way than the standard with this sort of theme. -
I really enjoyed reading this one....I all too well know the feeling of grief and of losing someone....I lost my 18 year old son in a wreck so I very much understand what you are saying here! great write my friend.....keep up the good work
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