Cement weigh's down on my conscience.
Sticking to thought's of chaos,
Are the barricades I have built to keep myself safe.
When all I have done is wrap my sanity in chains,
Squeezing tightly with intent to fade
I cling to my lies,
The only truth I know these day's.
Cement weigh's down on my conscience.
Pain seer's my brittle thought's,
Exploding, as if with a purpose,
I cling to my lies
The only truth I know these day's.
Sticking to my insecurities,
The fear grab's hold.
I have wrapped my heart in chains
Tight, without mercy.
Walking willingly, closer to my grave.
I fall with no intent of rising.
As I live this life of thorns,
I cling to my lies
The only truth I know.
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Option # 8
My user Name is Bleeding Eternal.
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So powerful and deep again, just bloody painful here, the fear and insanity that eats you everyday, feeling like giving up because of how impossible it is to be killed...
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Hello. This is an interesting poem, although I have to mention that many words in here are possesive when I'm sure you meant them to be plural: day's = days, seer's = sears (unless of course you meant that you have a pain seer as your brittle thoughts), thought's = thoughts, and the like.
However, you do capture well the conscience of a person who feels weighed down in their web of lies, hiding from the world. The only way to get out is to let the truth set you free. -
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than you so much! I will make the necesary changes when I have the time. later on today perhaps. Thank you once again for your kind words and taking the time to show me my errors.
thanks.
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Wow!
This is really good!
I really, really like it!
The ending was amazing,
As I live this life of thorns,
I cling to my lies
The only truth I know.
IS definitly my favorite part, good job!
And good luck in my contest!
-Erin
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wow this is really good. i think that you need some revisions in some places but other than that its really good
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I think prompts can be taken in many different ways. Rarely do I say something can't work.
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