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[ Look at us baby, ]

Look at us baby,
Look at us now,
Look at our love,
Because we made it some how.

Everybody believed,
We would never be,
I guess they just didn't know,
How you could ever love someone like me.

For every day that i
Should have you by my side
I'll be very thankful,
I could never tell you a lie.

Look at us, up above
We are so in love
Soaring in the sky,
Just like a beautiful dove.

Now all the hurt is gone,
I knew it all along
We made it baby,
look at us now,

Baby look at us.

Author notes

The first two lines of every stanza except for the last one is part of the lyrics to look at us baby by Sarina Paris, and the last two lines of every stanza with the exception fo the last one are what i added. The last stanza and the verse by itself at the bottom are all part of the lyrics to look at us baby.


I'm using it as option number one, lexie, but i dont really care if it doesnt go with the contest, at least i entered!


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  • TwilightDazzles
    November 9, 2007

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    I feel as though you just copied the entire song save for a few lines, I don't know the teacher in me views this as plagerism, I mean I know you don't claim those lines as your own, but the majority of the lines in this are from that song. Its an amazing song, and the lines that you changed you did good with, but I don't feel you changed enough of them to make this piece yours. Best wishes in the contests you have entered this in.

  • kitkat92
    November 7, 2007
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    nice.....

    nice vision of love and well told, thanx for entering


  • lexie like woah
    October 27, 2007

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    great write.. your stupid but ily anyways... oh wait, that has nothing to do with the poem but i dont care, at least i commented


  • X iMPERFECTiON x
    October 25, 2007
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    nice job! but u need to give me ur useraname or i'll have to dq u! thnx


    • torieshawesum
      October 25, 2007
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      oops.... i forgot about that .... he he.... my username is
      icantcmylifefrmhere

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