on mucker's mountain
clear cut, barren
i recognized her by the clothes
she was wearin
I saw mercy mary
on her knees
prayin for god's murdered trees
... and the town folks called her crazy
mascara smeared
her white face cryin
word was she was dirty
.. i knew they was lyin
i may have only been a child then
when i looked into mary's weeping face
and though she'd know'd too many men
heaven knew her from another place
and backwoods judgments
can be junkyard dog mean
but a child's heart
knows what it's seen
because when mercy mary spoke to me
my soul and spirit never felt so clean
yeah, when mercy mary spoke to me
my soul and spirit never felt so clean
A contest entry
- Mother Mary Comes To Me - til midnight EST USA by CarolDesjarlais.
1200 points, ended October 25, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Bronze trophy winner
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Excellent
People seem to under rate what they do not understand, rushing to judgment seems to be a common human trate. This woman is painted as clear as dawn, wonderfully done.
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This has all the soul needed to make it great. Imagery paints the pictures we see before time and cynicism ruin the view and make us just like all the others pointing fingers and making judgments. You don't have to be perfect to have heart.
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BRAVO! you captured the emotion on her face in your poem so well! awesomeee job! I was like wow..totally blew me away and amazing imagery too...great great work
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Congrats
Beautiful bronze...smiles
Wonderful write...
Peace and many blessings
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I have to agree with everyone on this write..It honestly sings so beautifully, I too would like to know if you sing this?....
Lovely work...best wishes with this entry..
Peace
~A~
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Asdzaa Nadleehe
Thank you so much! There was definitely music in my head while I wrote this!
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This is tremendous! Love the voice here, the clarity of vision through eyes without judgement in them.
This piece truly does sing and it is a graceful tune.
Blue
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Blue Rew
Thank you so much for your words...they made this heart sing!
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This is great writing here. I love the words in this piece. Very very inspiring indeed. More please.
All the best
Wayne
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Wayne Leon
What wonderful words...you made my heart sing! Thanks for reading me!
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Wow you are very good dear a very fine poet indeed
I liked this Can you sing it?
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Swan song
Why thank you so much, for your words that inspire and for reading me... I did have music in my mind when I wrote it. To me poetry and music/rhythm are so intertwined it is hard to distinguish the difference. Again THANK YOU!
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You know it was only towards the end I realized this rhymed. Heaven knows I hate rhyming poetry and this is quite amazing really. I didn't mind it at all! This honestly is some good stuff.
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Axelle Black
Thanks Axelle!
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I absolutely loveeeeeeeeeeeeeee the voice in this poem.... what a great great write.
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This is very kinky.
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UnchartedPoet
Why what a lovely comment! Thank you so much for reading me! -
Barry Hodges
.... Barry, Barry, Barry, what a dirty mind YOU have fellow poet
I MUST read you *smack*
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Oh this was good, love the dark, sadness and dirty to clean take of your write. Good job and best of luck in the contest.
Jen
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