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Springtime Love!

Her love blossoms in my heart.
Effervescing my every mood with sunlight.
As our souls unite in the soil of sweet devotion.

A contest entry

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  • Amy Meneses
    October 29, 2007

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    Ok so round #3 of this contest. I am digging into whether or not I believe the poem needs more. In other words, does this poem stand alone wonderfully or does it need more; does it sound complete.
    This poem flowed nicely and the form didn’t seem to take anything away from it, instead, it enhanced it which is exactly the element I was looking for in this contest. The result however seems like a simple and noble love which takes away from the idea of an abstraction, then again, I just any love is an abstraction. Good job here.


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    October 25, 2007

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    nice job honey each word of this piece is sensual and loaded with romance this is how Mr. G gets down i like it good luck in the contest


  • Lil Atl 30319
    October 25, 2007

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    very nice three lines here
    they happen to had said a
    whole lot you put a lot of
    inspiration in to these lyrics
    good luck to you in the contest

    nice job
    Lil Atl 30319


  • Ephiphany
    October 25, 2007
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    Great 3 line lyrics my friend

    wonderful prompt on this contest theme.
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