Sarcasm laughs at morals falling
Covered with dark disregard
Knowing society has given up
Author notes
Are we losing hold of our hold on reality and becoming a idiocracy?
Line#1 Abstraction plus verb, plus place
Line #2 Clothe the abstraction
Line #3 Summarizes the action
Idiocracy", derives from the Greek words idiotes (meaning originally a private individual but, later, an individual who was too stupid or incompetent to participate in public life) and krates (meaning rule or political power) - thus, idiocracy is rule by the stupid.
A contest entry
- Three Line Poems by Amy Meneses.
600 points, ended October 29, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ok so round #3 of this contest. I am digging into whether or not I believe the poem needs more. In other words, does this poem stand alone wonderfully or does it need more; does it sound complete.
I think you did a nice job illustrating sarcasm but this reads a bit choppy and forced as you can feel the transitions a bit much. Never the less, I think you did a good job making this seem complete. Good job!
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Thank you so much. Thanks for being critcal as well. I need that to be better at what I do. The last line was a little open ended but some what finished but i can see your point
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This is so very true! You have done very well with this! Thanks for sharing and I wish you the best in the contest
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It was short but I wanted a lot of power into it. Thank ya!!!
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This is deep and very thought provoking..All the best!
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Thank U
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You are welcome
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Love the 1st line. This is very insightful and something we can use for future reference. b/c no one is perfect so there's always gonna be room for human error.
Love this though. Good Luck!!!
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Thank U my friend - it was something that stuck in my mind.
But you are so right. Human error is a human quality ~ Mikeeee
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Very deep lyrics my friend
loved how you broke it down even the more in your Author's Notes....very educational. Good luck, sure you will do well.
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Thanks C*Cherry - it jumped out while I was on a conference call. Weird huh?
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If the people don't stop many of their actions you stand so correct. Sarcasm is damn near a life style for so many of our youth. Now Son you know some people do some stupid stuff....so this poem rocks! Strong message you are sharing...Mom
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I know, I know. I still lapse into stupidity as well. this one flew out of me after a conference call. so you can imagine the stupidity there - thanks mom
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The poet melds philosophy and the lack of ideology to poetically voice pertinent points re idiocracy,Mom used to say that sarcasm was the lowest form of wit and those that used it best beware cutting their lip on it.Liked the alliteration and intensity of "dark disregard" it imbued the brooding bombastic nature that those with dark disregard have.Oh my,now my comment is longer than your write!End of rambling dear poet.
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LOL!!! thank you. My wife tells me that sometimes. She says thats why my lips get so chapped and bleeding( her personal joke on me) Thanks for understanding the deeper meaning beyond the 3 lines. Life in the states is getting really outrageous.
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