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Daddy Loves Me



Daddy loves me,

he doesn't mean to get mad.

Daddy loves me,

I just got him real sad.

Daddy loves me,

he said he always will.

Daddy wont love me,

if he doesn't get his fill.

Daddy hates me,

because I cried real loud.

Daddy hates me,

because I made a sound.

Daddy hates me,

because I told him no.

Daddy wont hate me,

if I don't tell him to go.

Mummy hates me,

because I wont tell her why.

Mummy hates me,

when I just cry and I cry.

Mummy hates me,

Because I don't understand.

Mummy doesn't hate me,

because she lent me a hand.

Daddy hates me,

because in the end I told.

Mummy loves me,

because I am as good as gold.

Daddy's gone,

but Mummy is always here.

Mummy's around,

so I don't hold any fear.

 

Author notes

A little girls Daddy does bad things to her, but she eventually tells her Mum, who calls the police so Daddy is taken away and the little girl feels safer. It's cute, but it's supposed to show a deeper meaning : protect your kids and if you are young and are being abused, please speak out. Your life will be more hell if you don't tell anyone than if you do. Would you rather be punished always, or risk a bigger punishment, but more than likely get away from the abuser?

It's hard, but you need to be strong, otherwise it will never stop.


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  • Violent Glass
    January 26

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    this is great
    i love the way you write
    this was really good
    luckily i can't remember ever relating to this
    my theripist think i probably can but i dont remember
    i thought this was really good!


  • CharleeBoy
    December 1, 2008

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    I felt this one, my mother has always been there for me. As for my father? Well, never met him. But getting back to the poem, it was written so simple yet tug at the strings of your heart. Great job, keep it up.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    wow
    what a horrible thing to have happen by one's own parent

    a strong write, both sad and intense


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 24, 2008

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    Congrats on all the shinys!

    A very sad and intense piece. You have really got the message across well here. I hope many read it and it helps at least one person. Superbly penned. All the best in the contest with it


  • serenity silvermoon
    March 23, 2008

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    this is a very sad read but it is a great one as well my dad never sexelly hurt me but has abused me sad thing is he stole me from my mom and would not let me see her thanks for sharing god bless you always love serenity


  • HeavensDaughter
    February 6, 2008

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    A powerful write! I hope that any young person reading it will be encouraged to tell. And I hope that all adults reading it will hear the message loud and clear to listen to the little ones.

    I like this:
    "Daddy's gone,
    but Mummy is always here.
    Mummy's around,
    so I don't hold any fear. "

    I am so glad that you expressed that the fear CAN go away!

  • Nighttime angel
    January 28, 2008

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    this is a very powerful poem, that has a very strong and important message. the fact that you did this from a child's perspective, hits home even more so. children should be protected, nurtured. not abused at all.

    good luck in the contest.

    kat


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 16, 2008

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    So sad.. I am always touched by poems from the child's perspective.

    But a good message about speaking out... if only more children felt they could


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    January 14, 2008

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    Depth. Depth is what this write screams.
    Made me cry for many reasons; excellent write

    .♥.
    Thank you for your entry
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • abuyi
    November 26, 2007

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    daddy hates cause i say NO!!!!
    very well writtn and its with very clear message.. i wonder how would mother feel??
    great write and congrats for ur bronze
    regards
    abuyi

  • Giving-Up
    November 12, 2007
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    Holy Hell this is the greatest poem i have read yet. I just dont kno what to say its just so great


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    this is one of the best entries for what i have asked for. i would like to thank you for truly writing with the voice of a child. i wish you well with all your future writings and in this contest of mine. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie

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