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Tell Me Lord

O tell me Lord; where do I stand?
I know there’s much that I should do.
I’m ready Lord please take my hand.
For soon I know our time is through.

I know there’s much that I should do.
I’m here my Lord to do your will.
For soon I know our time is through,
the prophesy you will fulfill.

I’m here my Lord to do your will.
I know that with your pow’r and might,
the prophesy you will fulfill.
Why can’t our people see the light?

I know that with your pow’r and might,
The end is here as scripture told.
Why can’t our people see the light?
It’s been this way since days of old.

The end is here as scripture told.
For soon you’ll come within the clouds.
It’s been this way since days of old.
The world today is veiled in shrouds.

For soon you’ll come within the clouds.
I’m ready Lord please take my hand.
I know there’s much that I should do.
O tell me Lord; where do I stand?

 

 

 

Author notes

Pantoum:
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

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  • Samplette gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    This is a lovely poem, and it is written in a beautiful form. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam


  • Frogzter gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    This is a great pantoum as well as a wonderful prayer. It blessed me just reading it! Thanks and blessings your way!

    Frogz~

  • Figaro
    November 4, 2007
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    Beautiful, and very powerful.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 3, 2007
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    A beautiful poem/prayer, full of concern for those who refuse to see or acknowledge what has been proclaimed. If we stand in the grace of the Son, we have nothing to fear for ourselves.

    This background is so beautiful, the faces portrayed are of grave concern and love.


  • PerVirtuous
    October 25, 2007

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    You have so many facets to your soul and you are such a wonderful Quick-change artist. I never know what mantle you will wear when I come to read your works. What is so wonderful to me as that you wear them all so well. This is a serene and loving work that brings the reader to a place of solitude and wonder. Fantastic.


  • MargaretG
    October 25, 2007

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    Well done, you have expressed a personal and faithful response to the scripture. Your pantoum is beautiful, except for a diversion from form in the last stanza. Easily fixed! Best of luck.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    Moving Pantoum!

    Niece, a delight to see a pantoum that keeps repeating gently, "Where do I stand?" and points the way to redemption and being ready for our Saviours' return...Thank God that you have shared, in such a beautiful way....A tribute to you!


  • Desire gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    Powerful!!

    Love this piece You have penned and spoken from within...
    Powerful energy exuded
    Beautiful picture to compliment Your words
    Sweet Soul
    Wonderfully presented

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart~
    Keep that quill dancing

    Best wishes to You in the contest busy bee!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • HaleyMary
    October 24, 2007

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    Beautiful write, but seemed also sad in a way. It made me think of surveying the way the world is today and seeing all the pain, war, starvation in the world and thinking about how sad a state the world is in. Seemed like a beautiful prayer for the world. Best of luck in the contest, Sis.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    Excellent Poem Beautiful prayer full of hope and grace


  • capricornpoet
    October 24, 2007

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    Pantoum flows like a prayer of hope, the repetitions of the pantoum call out pleading for a holy one to reach for your hand..inspiring.


  • StarEyes
    October 24, 2007

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    What a great job my friend!! You did a knock up job on this one my friend!! Fantastic!!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta

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