Beauty breathes into my vision
adorning prismatic swirls of color,
fogging vision with images of passion.
Author notes
Trying new form:
Line#1 Abstraction plus verb, plus place
Line #2 Clothe the abstraction
Line #3 Summarizes the action
A contest entry
- Three Line Poems by Amy Meneses.
600 points, ended October 29, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ok so round #3 of this contest. I am digging into whether or not I believe the poem needs more. In other words, does this poem stand alone wonderfully or does it need more; does it sound complete.
I liked the way you made this smooth and flowing although it is so short. I didn’t feel hung at the end but instead, complete. “Beauty breathes into my vision” is a unique and complex idea but you bring it to life when you add “adorning prismatic swirls of color.” Nice job here.
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This was wonderful. Welcome to the contest.
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Thank you very much
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this is why I like this format, "Beauty breaths" such an interesting way to personify beauty
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Thank you again
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I like this sweety you have done a nice job with this piece thank you for sharing this with me.Goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes and much love
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