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In Her Pocket

Curiosity itches in impatient hands
Stuffed in pockets like a staight jacket
Begging to know his touch

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  • Amy Meneses
    October 29, 2007

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    Ok so round #3 of this contest. I am digging into whether or not I believe the poem needs more. In other words, does this poem stand alone wonderfully or does it need more; does it sound complete.
    I am assuming you meant “straight jacket” ???? I think although you did get creative and bring a unified concept here, it seems like unfinished work that perhaps can be built on a bit more in my opinion. I don’t think “beginning to know his touch” is powerful enough to end this.

  • Amy Meneses
    October 24, 2007
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    :-D