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~Minds Daggers~

Accusations stalk tips of tongue,
dressed in tainted thoughts.
Ready to shatter innocent liaisons.


A contest entry

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  • Amy Meneses
    October 29, 2007

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    Ok so round #3 of this contest. I am digging into whether or not I believe the poem needs more. In other words, does this poem stand alone wonderfully or does it need more; does it sound complete.
    Although I think you did an excellent job here and followed the form correctly I still think this needs more. In other words, this would go great as the beginning lines of a poem but this doesn’t seems to stand well on it’s own. It’s not a bad thing at all, actually if you expand on this idea of tainted accusations you will definitely come up with something even more amazing. I see amazing potential here.


  • daviscth silver member
    October 24, 2007

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    Just when I think you can't surprise me anymore.... You do!!!

    I enjoyed this very much. Good luck in the contest.

    Cathy


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    Deep and so very well thought-out and executed.